Darwin waterfront, 2009 and 2014: IELTS Task 1 answer #7, band 6.5
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179 words. Marked by Axiom on 6 April 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The map this answer describes
2009
- Two areas are explicitly labelled industrial area.
- Residential buildings are grouped below the lake.
2014
- Neither industrial-area label nor its hatch marks remain.
- A university building, harbour and an additional swimming pool are shown.
- There are more residential-building symbols and trees.
Academic Task 1179 words
The maps show the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
The maps illustrate the changes that have taken place in Darwin town between 2009 and 2014.
It should also be noted that new harbour has been built, adding additional function to the town.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, Darwin town underwent significant transformation with the introduction of residential buildings and a university, as well as the removal of the industrial zone.
Ensures consistent use of past tense.
Additionally, industrial area covered almost half of the town with three residential buildings.
Lexical resource
RevisedA closer look at the maps reveals that in 2009, the town featured a lake with a convention center situated behind it.
Improves sentence structure and clarity.
In 2014, however, three additional residential buildings have been constructed to the center of the area. Although the convention center, fishing area and shcool have remained unchanged, new university building has been built near the houses.
Lexical resource
RevisedAnother notable change is the removal of the industrial area, which has been replaced by trees.
Clarifies the sentence structure and improves word choice.
Lexical resource
RevisedIt is also worth noting that the new harbour was introduced near the scattered trees, and a new footpath was created to provide access to it.
Improves clarity and flow.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedMoreover, an additional swimming pool was introduced where the industrial area stood in 2009.
Ensures consistent use of past tense.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is well-organized with a clear overview and logical progression of ideas. However, there are some areas where cohesion could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure consistent use of tenses.
- Clarify the sequence of changes.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, Darwin town underwent significant transformation with the introduction of residential buildings and a university, as well as the removal of the industrial zone.
Ensures consistent use of past tense.
RevisedIn 2014, however, three additional residential buildings were constructed in the center of the area.
Maintains past tense consistency.
RevisedMoreover, an additional swimming pool was introduced where the industrial area stood in 2009.
Ensures consistent use of past tense.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures, but there are frequent errors in tense and article usage.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, Darwin town underwent significant transformation with the introduction of residential buildings and a university, as well as the removal of the industrial zone.
Corrects tense and article usage.
RevisedIn 2014, however, three additional residential buildings were constructed in the center of the area.
Corrects tense usage.
RevisedMoreover, an additional swimming pool was introduced where the industrial area stood in 2009.
Corrects article and tense usage.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The lexical resource is adequate with some variety in vocabulary. However, there are minor errors in word choice and repetition.
Sentence revisions 4
RevisedOverall, Darwin town experienced significant transformation with the introduction of residential buildings and a university, along with the removal of the industrial zone.
Improves word choice and clarity.
RevisedAnother notable change is the removal of the industrial area, which has been replaced by trees.
Clarifies the sentence structure and improves word choice.
RevisedIt is also worth noting that the new harbour was introduced near the scattered trees, and a new footpath was created to provide access to it.
Improves clarity and flow.
RevisedA closer look at the maps reveals that in 2009, the town featured a lake with a convention center situated behind it.
Improves sentence structure and clarity.
Task achievement
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, providing a clear overview and specific details about the changes.
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