Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #23, band 6.5

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Average house prices (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (thousand dollars)
	Country A	Country B	Country C
1997	150	125	100
1998	175	200	125
1999	200	225	125
2000	200	250	150
2001	300	275	150
2002	400	300	150
2003	550	300	175
2004	500	325	175
2005	475	375	200
2006	450	300	200
2007	500	275	225
2008	550	275	150
2009	600	375	250
2010	600	475	275
2011	600	500	275
2012	625	525	300
2013	600	500	300
2014	625	500	275

Academic Task 1241 words

The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The line graph illustrates the changes in average accommodation costs in three different countries from 1997 to 2014.Overall, the figures followed an upward trend, despite the fluctuations in intervening years. While the figure for Country A was generally the highest throughout the given period, followed by that of Country B, Country C remained at the bottom, albeit a gradual rise.

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RevisedThe line graph illustrates changes in average house prices in three countries from 1997 to 2014.
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RevisedOverall, the figures followed an upward trend, despite fluctuations in the intervening years.
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Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedWhile the figure for Country A was generally the highest throughout the period, followed by Country B, Country C remained at the bottom, albeit with a gradual rise.
Corrected punctuation and sentence structure for clarity.

Country A and Country C shared the same standings in house values in initial years. It was not until these prices began increasing at the turn of the century, with the former rising its costs up to $500,000 in 2004 and the latter reaching $300,000 in the same year. The difference became even more pronounced when both figures started decreasing gradually over five-year period, with Country A plummeting to mere $250,000 and Country B falling to about $480,000.The gap was narrowed down in 2009 when the house prices of Country B skyrocketed, doubling the previous cost at $500,000.The figures for both countries adhered to different trends, with the first following rising trend and the second remaining stable in remaining years.

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RevisedIn the initial years, Country A and Country C had similar house values.
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RevisedThe figures for both countries followed different trends, with Country A's prices rising and Country B's remaining stable in the remaining years.
Clarified which country is being referred to for better understanding.

Country C, however, bucked the trend. Starting at the same point as other two countries at around $130,000, house costs of Country C followed an uninterrupted rising figure, before bouncing back to initial $130,000 down from $250,000.Thereafter, there was a recovery to $250,000 in accommodation price in the turn of a year, remaining the same till the end of the period.

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RevisedHowever, Country C did not follow this trend.
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Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedStarting at the same point as the other two countries at around $130,000, house prices in Country C rose steadily before dropping back to the initial $130,000 from $250,000.
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RevisedThereafter, there was a recovery to $250,000 in house prices within a year, remaining stable until the end of the period.
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Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear paragraphing and transitions.

Suggestions

Use clear paragraphing to separate different ideas.
Add more linking words to improve flow.
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, the figures followed an upward trend, despite fluctuations in the intervening years.
Improved sentence flow by removing unnecessary words.
RevisedIn the initial years, Country A and Country C had similar house values.
Reordered sentence for clarity.
RevisedThe figures for both countries followed different trends, with Country A's prices rising and Country B's remaining stable in the remaining years.
Clarified which country is being referred to for better understanding.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures, but there are errors in sentence structure and punctuation.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedWhile the figure for Country A was generally the highest throughout the period, followed by Country B, Country C remained at the bottom, albeit with a gradual rise.
Corrected punctuation and sentence structure for clarity.
RevisedStarting at the same point as the other two countries at around $130,000, house prices in Country C rose steadily before dropping back to the initial $130,000 from $250,000.
Improved sentence structure and clarity.
RevisedThereafter, there was a recovery to $250,000 in house prices within a year, remaining stable until the end of the period.
Improved grammatical accuracy and clarity.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary but lacks precision in some areas.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedThe line graph illustrates changes in average house prices in three countries from 1997 to 2014.
Used more specific vocabulary to match the task description.
RevisedThe difference became more pronounced as both figures gradually decreased over a five-year period.
Improved precision and clarity.
RevisedHowever, Country C did not follow this trend.
Used more formal language suitable for academic writing.

Task achievement

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task and includes relevant information but lacks some detail and precision.

Suggestions

Include more specific data points to support comparisons.
Ensure all key trends are clearly explained.

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