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Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #21, band 6.5

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168 words. Marked by Axiom on 6 August 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The line graph this answer describes

Average house prices (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Country A, Country B, Country C for 1997, 1998, 1999, 2000, 2001, 2002, 2003, 2004, 2005, 2006, 2007, 2008, 2009, 2010, 2011, 2012, 2013, 2014, in thousand dollars. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0200400600800199719992001200320052007200920112013
Average house prices (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Country A, Country B, Country C for 1997, 1998, 1999, 2000, 2001, 2002, 2003, 2004, 2005, 2006, 2007, 2008, 2009, 2010, 2011, 2012, 2013, 2014, in thousand dollars. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.020040060080019972001200520092013
Values in thousand dollars. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
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Average house prices (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (thousand dollars)
Country ACountry BCountry C
1997150125100
1998175200125
1999200225125
2000200250150
2001300275150
2002400300150
2003550300175
2004500325175
2005475375200
2006450300200
2007500275225
2008550275150
2009600375250
2010600475275
2011600500275
2012625525300
2013600500300
2014625500275

Academic Task 1168 words

The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014

The graph illustrates the amount of average house prices in three different countries between 1997 and 2014.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOverall, the prices in country A remained the highest throughout most of the period.

    Clarified the sentence for better understanding.

  2. Lexical resource

    RevisedNotably, house prices increased in all three countries.

    Simplified the sentence to avoid repetition.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedStarting at approximately 130 thousand dollars in 1997, the costs in country C rose to 250 thousand dollars by 2007, before dropping significantly in 2008.

    Improved sentence structure for clarity.

  2. Lexical resource

    RevisedIt then recovered to 250 thousand dollars in the subsequent years.

    Improved lexical choice for clarity.

  3. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedThe costs in country B began at roughly 150 thousand dollars and experienced a marginal rise to 250 thousand dollars by 2008, eventually growing significantly to about 500 thousand dollars by the final year.

    Revised for better flow and clarity.

  1. Lexical resource

    RevisedThe cost of accommodations in country A showed a consistent upward trend throughout.

    Enhanced vocabulary for precision.

  2. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedThere was a considerable increase to nearly 550 thousand dollars by 2004.

    Corrected preposition use for grammatical accuracy.

  3. Lexical resource

    RevisedFurthermore, it increased to approximately 750 thousand dollars in the following decade.

    Added specificity to the sentence.

Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.

Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a logical order, but there are some issues with clarity and flow.

Suggestions

  • Use more linking words to improve flow.
  • Clarify the comparison between countries.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, the prices in country A remained the highest throughout most of the period.

    Clarified the sentence for better understanding.

  • RevisedStarting at approximately 130 thousand dollars in 1997, the costs in country C rose to 250 thousand dollars by 2007, before dropping significantly in 2008.

    Improved sentence structure for clarity.

  • RevisedThe costs in country B began at roughly 150 thousand dollars and experienced a marginal rise to 250 thousand dollars by 2008, eventually growing significantly to about 500 thousand dollars by the final year.

    Revised for better flow and clarity.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, the prices in country A were the most expensive throughout most of the period.

    Removed unnecessary article for grammatical accuracy.

  • RevisedIt recovered to 250 thousand dollars in the following years.

    Corrected sentence fragment for grammatical accuracy.

  • RevisedThere was a considerable increase to nearly 550 thousand dollars by 2004.

    Corrected preposition use for grammatical accuracy.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some repetition and inaccuracies are present.

Sentence revisions 4

  • RevisedNotably, house prices increased in all three countries.

    Simplified the sentence to avoid repetition.

  • RevisedIt then recovered to 250 thousand dollars in the subsequent years.

    Improved lexical choice for clarity.

  • RevisedThe cost of accommodations in country A showed a consistent upward trend throughout.

    Enhanced vocabulary for precision.

  • RevisedFurthermore, it increased to approximately 750 thousand dollars in the following decade.

    Added specificity to the sentence.

Task achievement

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task and includes relevant information, but lacks some detail and precision.

Suggestions

  • Include more specific data points from the graph.
  • Provide clearer comparisons between the countries.
  • Ensure all key trends are highlighted.

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