Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #31, band 7.0
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194 words. Marked by Axiom on 25 June 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The line graph this answer describes
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| Country A | Country B | Country C | |
|---|---|---|---|
| 1997 | 150 | 125 | 100 |
| 1998 | 175 | 200 | 125 |
| 1999 | 200 | 225 | 125 |
| 2000 | 200 | 250 | 150 |
| 2001 | 300 | 275 | 150 |
| 2002 | 400 | 300 | 150 |
| 2003 | 550 | 300 | 175 |
| 2004 | 500 | 325 | 175 |
| 2005 | 475 | 375 | 200 |
| 2006 | 450 | 300 | 200 |
| 2007 | 500 | 275 | 225 |
| 2008 | 550 | 275 | 150 |
| 2009 | 600 | 375 | 250 |
| 2010 | 600 | 475 | 275 |
| 2011 | 600 | 500 | 275 |
| 2012 | 625 | 525 | 300 |
| 2013 | 600 | 500 | 300 |
| 2014 | 625 | 500 | 275 |
Academic Task 1194 words
The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014.
The line graph illustrated the changes in accommodation prices in three countries from 1997 to 2014
Notably , country A experienced substantial growth and remained predominant throughout the given timeframe , followed by country B , country C remained at the bottom, despite a gradual increase
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, all the given countries experienced an upward trend in accommodation prices, albeit to varying degrees.
The term 'adhere to' is not typically used to describe price trends. It would be more accurate to say that the countries 'experienced' an upward trend.
It was not until 2004, when the former country reached over 500.00$ with the latter raising the prices to 300.00$. From that year on , the discrepancy became more pronounced, with country A seeing its accommodation prices skyrocket to 750.00$, while country B remained relatively stable in its figures.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn the initial years, both Country A and Country B had similar price points, at 200.00$.
The term 'standing' is not typically used to describe prices. 'Price point' would be a more appropriate term in this context.
Lexical resource
RevisedThis gap narrowed by 2009, when the price for a house in country B reached a whopping 550.000 $, while country A experienced a marginal decline to roughly 530.000$.
The term 'priced a single house' is not typically used in this context. It would be more appropriate to say 'the price for a house in country B'.
Country C somewhat bucked the trend, following an uninterrupted upward trajectory. The figure for country C experienced a steady growth before a significant drop to about 100.000$ in 2008.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedFrom that point onwards, the figure for Country C
It is not clear what 'this figure' refers to in the sentence. It would be clearer to specify 'the figure for Country C'.
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the information is clearly and coherently presented. The introduction provides an overview of the data, the body paragraphs compare the trends in the different countries, and the conclusion summarizes the main points. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a wider range of linking words to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, all the given countries experienced an upward trend in accommodation prices, albeit to varying degrees.
The term 'adhere to' is not typically used to describe price trends. It would be more accurate to say that the countries 'experienced' an upward trend.
RevisedIn the initial years, both Country A and Country B had similar price points, at 200.00$.
The term 'standing' is not typically used to describe prices. 'Price point' would be a more appropriate term in this context.
RevisedFrom that point onwards, the figure for Country C
It is not clear what 'this figure' refers to in the sentence. It would be clearer to specify 'the figure for Country C'.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there are only a few minor errors. However, there are a few instances where sentence structure could be improved for better clarity.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedIn the initial years, both Country A and Country B had a similar price point, at 200.00$.
The term 'standing' is not typically used to describe prices. 'Price point' would be a more appropriate term in this context.
RevisedThe gap between the two countries narrowed by 2009. By this time, country B's house prices had skyrocketed to 550.000 $, while country A experienced a marginal decline, with prices reaching roughly 530.000$.
The sentence could be made more clear and concise by rephrasing it in this way.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.
Sentence revisions 1
RevisedThis gap narrowed by 2009, when the price for a house in country B reached a whopping 550.000 $, while country A experienced a marginal decline to roughly 530.000$.
The term 'priced a single house' is not typically used in this context. It would be more appropriate to say 'the price for a house in country B'.
Task achievement
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The essay also provides specific details to support the main points. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed comparison of the data for the three countries.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed comparison of the data for the three countries. This could be done by discussing the relative positions of the countries at different points in time, or by comparing the growth rates of the different countries.
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