Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #8, band 7.0

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Values in thousand dollars. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.

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Average house prices (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (thousand dollars)
	Country A	Country B	Country C
1997	150	125	100
1998	175	200	125
1999	200	225	125
2000	200	250	150
2001	300	275	150
2002	400	300	150
2003	550	300	175
2004	500	325	175
2005	475	375	200
2006	450	300	200
2007	500	275	225
2008	550	275	150
2009	600	375	250
2010	600	475	275
2011	600	500	275
2012	625	525	300
2013	600	500	300
2014	625	500	275

Academic Task 1208 words

The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph provides a detailed data on how much housing cost in three different countries from 1997 to 2014. Overall, prices of average houses went up significantly, with country A depicting the highest ranks during the given span.

Lexical resource
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RevisedThe line graph provides detailed data on housing costs in three different countries from 1997 to 2014.
Removed unnecessary article for grammatical accuracy.
Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedOverall, the average house prices increased significantly, with country A showing the highest rise over the period.
Improved clarity and flow by rephrasing.

While the countries A and B experienced threefold and twofold rises correspondingly, the costs in country C increased rather unnoticeably. Country A started off at around 187,000 in 1997 before surging up to above 500,000 dollars in 2004. This rise had been then followed by a mere loss until just under 500,000 in 2007, when it began going up again to the final 750,000.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedWhile countries A and B experienced threefold and twofold increases respectively, the costs in country C rose more subtly.
Clarified comparison and improved transition.
Lexical resource
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RevisedThis rise was followed by a slight decline to just under 500,000 in 2007, before increasing again to 750,000.
Replaced 'mere loss' with 'slight decline' for clarity and precision.

A similar pattern was in the case of country B, where the indications rose from initial 180,000 to just below 500,000 in 2009, then remained unchanged until the end of the period. This figure also went through a slight decrease between the years 2004 and 2008 but recovered in just a year.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedCountry B followed a similar pattern, with prices rising from an initial 180,000 to just below 500,000 by 2009, then remaining stable until the end of the period.
Enhanced coherence by restructuring the sentence.

Lastly, country C depicted an upward trend with much lower indications. Having started at 125,000 in the beginning, the cost went slightly up until roughly 250,000 in 2007 before falling again to its initial amount in the following year. However, the figure experienced a recovery and the houses again costed 250,000 in 2014.

Lexical resource
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RevisedLastly, country C showed an upward trend with much lower figures.
Replaced 'indications' with 'figures' for better lexical choice.
Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedStarting at 125,000, the cost increased slightly to roughly 250,000 in 2007 before falling back to its initial amount the following year.
Simplified sentence structure for clarity.
Lexical resource
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RevisedHowever, the figure recovered, and houses cost 250,000 again in 2014.
Corrected verb form and improved sentence structure.

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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay is well-organized with clear progression of ideas. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.

Suggestions

Use more varied linking words to enhance flow.
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, the average house prices increased significantly, with country A showing the highest rise over the period.
Improved clarity and flow by rephrasing.
RevisedWhile countries A and B experienced threefold and twofold increases respectively, the costs in country C rose more subtly.
Clarified comparison and improved transition.
RevisedCountry B followed a similar pattern, with prices rising from an initial 180,000 to just below 500,000 by 2009, then remaining stable until the end of the period.
Enhanced coherence by restructuring the sentence.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, though some errors are present.

Sentence revisions 2

RevisedThis rise was then followed by a slight decline to just under 500,000 in 2007, before increasing again to 750,000.
Corrected tense usage for clarity.
RevisedStarting at 125,000, the cost increased slightly to roughly 250,000 in 2007 before falling back to its initial amount the following year.
Simplified sentence structure for clarity.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, though some words are repeated.

Sentence revisions 4

RevisedThe line graph provides detailed data on housing costs in three different countries from 1997 to 2014.
Removed unnecessary article for grammatical accuracy.
RevisedThis rise was followed by a slight decline to just under 500,000 in 2007, before increasing again to 750,000.
Replaced 'mere loss' with 'slight decline' for clarity and precision.
RevisedLastly, country C showed an upward trend with much lower figures.
Replaced 'indications' with 'figures' for better lexical choice.
RevisedHowever, the figure recovered, and houses cost 250,000 again in 2014.
Corrected verb form and improved sentence structure.

Task achievement

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay effectively summarizes the main features of the graph and makes relevant comparisons.

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