Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #27, band 7.5
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208 words. Marked by Axiom on 23 December 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
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| Country A | Country B | Country C | |
|---|---|---|---|
| 1997 | 150 | 125 | 100 |
| 1998 | 175 | 200 | 125 |
| 1999 | 200 | 225 | 125 |
| 2000 | 200 | 250 | 150 |
| 2001 | 300 | 275 | 150 |
| 2002 | 400 | 300 | 150 |
| 2003 | 550 | 300 | 175 |
| 2004 | 500 | 325 | 175 |
| 2005 | 475 | 375 | 200 |
| 2006 | 450 | 300 | 200 |
| 2007 | 500 | 275 | 225 |
| 2008 | 550 | 275 | 150 |
| 2009 | 600 | 375 | 250 |
| 2010 | 600 | 475 | 275 |
| 2011 | 600 | 500 | 275 |
| 2012 | 625 | 525 | 300 |
| 2013 | 600 | 500 | 300 |
| 2014 | 625 | 500 | 275 |
Academic Task 1208 words
The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014.
After a brief dip in the mid-2000s, prices resume their rise and reach the highest level among the three countries by 2014, indicating persistent inflation or higher price growth relative to the others.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe graph illustrates the average house prices in three countries over the period from 1997 to 2014.
Using 'illustrates' instead of 'presents' can make the sentence more engaging.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, while all countries exhibit an upward trend, the magnitudes and fluctuations vary significantly.
Rephrasing for clarity and emphasis on variation.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThe most striking pattern is seen in Country A, which begins at a relatively low level in 1997 but experiences rapid growth in the early 2000s, peaking noticeably around 2002–2004.
Rephrasing for clarity and conciseness.
Country B follows a more intermediate trajectory.
Lexical resource
RevisedPrices rise steadily from 1997 to around 2002–2004, then fluctuate throughout the remainder of the period with smaller gains compared to Country A.
Replacing 'oscillate' with 'fluctuate' for more common usage.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedAlthough it ends higher in 2014 than in 1997, the scale of increase is clearly lower than that of Country A. The fluctuations suggest some volatility in the housing market.
Splitting the sentence for clarity.
Lexical resource
RevisedCountry C begins at the lowest level and remains the most stable, experiencing only gradual increases over the period.
Using 'begins' instead of 'starts' for variety.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIts prices show little dramatic change, and by 2014, they remain well below those of Countries A and B.
Adding a comma for better sentence structure.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe widening gap after 2010 highlights that Country A’s housing market has significantly outpaced the others in recent years.
Adding 'highlights' for emphasis and clarity.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
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Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is well-organized with a clear structure. Each country is discussed in separate paragraphs, allowing for easy comparison.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to enhance flow.
- Provide a clearer summary or conclusion.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe graph illustrates the average house prices in three countries over the period from 1997 to 2014.
Using 'illustrates' instead of 'presents' can make the sentence more engaging.
RevisedOverall, while all countries exhibit an upward trend, the magnitudes and fluctuations vary significantly.
Rephrasing for clarity and emphasis on variation.
RevisedThe widening gap after 2010 highlights that Country A’s housing market has significantly outpaced the others in recent years.
Adding 'highlights' for emphasis and clarity.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedAlthough it ends higher in 2014 than in 1997, the scale of increase is clearly lower than that of Country A. The fluctuations suggest some volatility in the housing market.
Splitting the sentence for clarity.
RevisedIts prices show little dramatic change, and by 2014, they remain well below those of Countries A and B.
Adding a comma for better sentence structure.
RevisedThe most striking pattern is seen in Country A, which begins at a relatively low level in 1997 but experiences rapid growth in the early 2000s, peaking noticeably around 2002–2004.
Rephrasing for clarity and conciseness.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, but there is room for more sophisticated language.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedCountry A exhibits the most striking pattern, starting at a relatively low level in 1997 and experiencing rapid growth in the early 2000s.
Using 'exhibits' instead of 'is' adds variety and precision.
RevisedPrices rise steadily from 1997 to around 2002–2004, then fluctuate throughout the remainder of the period with smaller gains compared to Country A.
Replacing 'oscillate' with 'fluctuate' for more common usage.
RevisedCountry C begins at the lowest level and remains the most stable, experiencing only gradual increases over the period.
Using 'begins' instead of 'starts' for variety.
Task achievement
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay effectively summarizes the main features of the graph and makes relevant comparisons.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points to support statements.
- Ensure all key features are clearly highlighted.
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