Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #24, band 7.5
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258 words. Marked by Axiom on 2 September 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
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| Country A | Country B | Country C | |
|---|---|---|---|
| 1997 | 150 | 125 | 100 |
| 1998 | 175 | 200 | 125 |
| 1999 | 200 | 225 | 125 |
| 2000 | 200 | 250 | 150 |
| 2001 | 300 | 275 | 150 |
| 2002 | 400 | 300 | 150 |
| 2003 | 550 | 300 | 175 |
| 2004 | 500 | 325 | 175 |
| 2005 | 475 | 375 | 200 |
| 2006 | 450 | 300 | 200 |
| 2007 | 500 | 275 | 225 |
| 2008 | 550 | 275 | 150 |
| 2009 | 600 | 375 | 250 |
| 2010 | 600 | 475 | 275 |
| 2011 | 600 | 500 | 275 |
| 2012 | 625 | 525 | 300 |
| 2013 | 600 | 500 | 300 |
| 2014 | 625 | 500 | 275 |
Academic Task 1258 words
The graph below shows the aaverage hoouse prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe graph depicts the average house prices in three countries (A, B, and C) from 1997 to 2014.
Replaced 'illustrates' with 'depicts' for variety.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, house prices in all three countries experienced significant fluctuations, with Countries A and B showing more volatility than the relatively stable trend in Country C.
Simplified sentence structure for better flow.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedMoreover, the average house price in Country A was dominant for most of the period, whereas Country C consistently had the lowest prices.
Improved transition and clarity.
In detail, the average house price in Country A started at approximately $100,000 in 1997 and saw a dramatic increase to around $500,000 in 2005. However, this was followed by a sharp decline to about $300,000 in 2009 before stabilizing around $400,000 by 2014.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThis pattern indicates a significant rise followed by a notable decline.
Used 'decline' for better lexical choice and coherence.
Starting at around $50,000 in 1997, house prices rose steadily, peaking at approximately $250,000 in 2007. The fluctuations here, though present, were not as pronounced as those in Country A.
Lexical resource
RevisedCountry B showed a similar, though less extreme, pattern.
Replaced 'exhibited' with 'showed' for simplicity.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedAfter a slight dip in 2008, prices rebounded and continued to rise, reaching nearly $300,000 by 2014.
Removed unnecessary words for conciseness.
In contrast, Country C showed a relatively steady increase in house prices. Beginning at just under $100,000 in 1997, prices increased gradually with minor fluctuations, reaching around $150,000 in 2008. After a brief drop in 2009, prices resumed their upward trend, peaking at approximately $200,000 in 2014.
Lexical resource
RevisedThis suggests a more stable housing market in Country C compared to the other two countries.
Replaced 'indicates' with 'suggests' for variety.
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Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is well-structured with a clear overview and detailed analysis of each country's house price trends. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more varied linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph logically follows from the previous one.
- Provide a clearer summary at the end.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, house prices in all three countries experienced significant fluctuations, with Countries A and B showing more volatility than the relatively stable trend in Country C.
Simplified sentence structure for better flow.
RevisedMoreover, the average house price in Country A was dominant for most of the period, whereas Country C consistently had the lowest prices.
Improved transition and clarity.
RevisedThis pattern indicates a significant rise followed by a notable decline.
Used 'decline' for better lexical choice and coherence.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay uses a variety of grammatical structures accurately. Minor errors do not impede understanding.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedCountry B showed a similar, though less extreme, pattern.
Simplified sentence structure for clarity.
RevisedAfter a slight dip in 2008, prices rebounded and continued to rise, reaching nearly $300,000 by 2014.
Removed unnecessary words for conciseness.
RevisedThis pattern indicates a significant rise followed by a notable decline.
Improved word choice for accuracy.
Lexical resource
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary appropriate for the task. Some repetition and minor errors are present.
Sentence revisions 4
RevisedThe graph depicts the average house prices in three countries (A, B, and C) from 1997 to 2014.
Replaced 'illustrates' with 'depicts' for variety.
RevisedCountry B showed a similar, though less extreme, pattern.
Replaced 'exhibited' with 'showed' for simplicity.
RevisedThis suggests a more stable housing market in Country C compared to the other two countries.
Replaced 'indicates' with 'suggests' for variety.
RevisedFurthermore, while the average house price in Country A was dominant for most of the timeframe, Country C consistently had the lowest prices.
Improved lexical choice and sentence clarity.
Task achievement
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay effectively addresses the task, providing a clear overview and detailed analysis of the data. Minor inaccuracies are present.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data points are accurately represented.
- Clarify any ambiguous statements.
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