Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #15, band 7.5

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185 words. Marked by Axiom on 21 July 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

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Values in thousand dollars. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.

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Average house prices (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (thousand dollars)
	Country A	Country B	Country C
1997	150	125	100
1998	175	200	125
1999	200	225	125
2000	200	250	150
2001	300	275	150
2002	400	300	150
2003	550	300	175
2004	500	325	175
2005	475	375	200
2006	450	300	200
2007	500	275	225
2008	550	275	150
2009	600	375	250
2010	600	475	275
2011	600	500	275
2012	625	525	300
2013	600	500	300
2014	625	500	275

Academic Task 1185 words

The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014

The line graph compares how much an average house cost in three countries from 1997 to 2014. Overall, housing prices rose in all three countries over the period, albeit at varying degrees. Notably, Country A had the highest prices in most of the years, while Country C recorded the lowest ones, since it saw a mere increase throughout.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedOverall, housing prices rose in all three countries over the period, although the rate of increase varied.
The word 'albeit' is less commonly used; 'although' is more straightforward.
Lexical resource
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RevisedNotably, Country A had the highest prices for most years, while Country C recorded the lowest, with only a slight increase throughout.
Replaced 'mere' with 'slight' for clarity and precision.

Country A topped the list, with it charging the highest amount for its houses. It started the period with around 125,000 dollars, rocketing to above 500,000 dollars after seven years. From 2004 onwards, the figure fluctuated widely, reaching 750,000 dollars, showing the most pronounced overall growth.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedCountry A topped the list, charging the highest amount for its houses.
Removed unnecessary words for clarity.
Lexical resource
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RevisedIt started the period at around 125,000 dollars, soaring to over 500,000 dollars after seven years.
Replaced 'rocketing' with 'soaring' for variety.

Although Country B had the same amount as the first country in 1997, it could not overtake the leading role. By 2008, the 125,000-dollar price had been doubled, followed by a dramatic increase to 500,000 dollars in the next year, which stood unchanged until the end.

Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedAlthough Country B had the same price as Country A in 1997, it could not overtake the leading position.
Clarified comparison for grammatical precision.
Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedBy 2008, the price had doubled to 250,000 dollars, followed by a dramatic increase to 500,000 dollars the next year, remaining unchanged until the end.
Clarified the progression of prices for better coherence.

As for Country C, it witnessed an unnoticeable rise to 250,000 dollars by 2008 from its initial 125,000 dollars – the price which was recorded in 2008 as well after a big drop from 2007.

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Coherence & cohesion

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay is generally well-organized with clear progression of ideas. However, some sentences could be more logically connected.

Suggestions

Use more linking words to improve flow.
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
Avoid abrupt transitions between ideas.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, housing prices rose in all three countries over the period, although the rate of increase varied.
The word 'albeit' is less commonly used; 'although' is more straightforward.
RevisedCountry A topped the list, charging the highest amount for its houses.
Removed unnecessary words for clarity.
RevisedBy 2008, the price had doubled to 250,000 dollars, followed by a dramatic increase to 500,000 dollars the next year, remaining unchanged until the end.
Clarified the progression of prices for better coherence.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedCountry A topped the list, charging the highest amount for its houses.
Simplified structure for grammatical accuracy.
RevisedAlthough Country B had the same price as Country A in 1997, it could not overtake the leading position.
Clarified comparison for grammatical precision.
RevisedThis price was also recorded in 2008 after a significant drop from 2007.
Revised for grammatical correctness and clarity.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some word choices could be improved for precision and variety.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedNotably, Country A had the highest prices for most years, while Country C recorded the lowest, with only a slight increase throughout.
Replaced 'mere' with 'slight' for clarity and precision.
RevisedIt started the period at around 125,000 dollars, soaring to over 500,000 dollars after seven years.
Replaced 'rocketing' with 'soaring' for variety.
RevisedCountry C experienced a minimal rise to 250,000 dollars by 2008 from its initial 125,000 dollars.
Replaced 'unnoticeable' with 'minimal' for accuracy.

Task achievement

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task effectively, summarizing key trends and making relevant comparisons.

Suggestions

Include more specific data points from the graph.
Ensure all main trends are covered.

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