Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #14, band 5.5

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248 words. Marked by Axiom on 18 July 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

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Values in thousand dollars. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.

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Average house prices (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (thousand dollars)
	Country A	Country B	Country C
1997	150	125	100
1998	175	200	125
1999	200	225	125
2000	200	250	150
2001	300	275	150
2002	400	300	150
2003	550	300	175
2004	500	325	175
2005	475	375	200
2006	450	300	200
2007	500	275	225
2008	550	275	150
2009	600	375	250
2010	600	475	275
2011	600	500	275
2012	625	525	300
2013	600	500	300
2014	625	500	275

Academic Task 1248 words

The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014.

The line graph compares the changes in the average house prices in three different countries from 1997 to 2014.Overall, average house prices saw an upward trend in all countries throughout the period.The amount of prices in country A dramatically increased in the beginning of the period while that of in country B and C rose gradually.Meanwhile, all figures oscillated until they registered a steady trend at the end of the period.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedThe prices in Country A dramatically increased at the beginning of the period, while those in Countries B and C rose gradually.
Clarified sentence structure and improved parallelism.
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RevisedMeanwhile, all figures fluctuated until they stabilized towards the end of the period.
Used more precise vocabulary and improved sentence clarity.

The amount of average house prices for country A saw a gradual rise from around $150 to approximately $200 in 2000 until it started an enormous climb to around $550 in 2003.After four-year of decreasing ,it started increasing and reached about 600k dollars in 2007.The last seven -year period was the period of stagnation with approximately 560k dollars of average house price.

Lexical resource
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RevisedThe average house prices in Country A gradually rose from around $150k to approximately $200k in 2000, before climbing steeply to around $550k in 2003.
Corrected inaccuracies and improved precision.
Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedAfter four years of decrease, it started increasing and reached about $600k in 2007.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved clarity.
Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedThe last seven-year period was one of stagnation, with the average house price around $560k.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.

The figures for country B registered similar upward trend ,it is gradually increased from 1200k dollars to 250 dollars in 2006 after that it is registered a downward trend until 2009 .Then there was a steep increase from 300 000 dollars to $510k in 2012 .At the end of the period there was a slight decrease to 480 thousand dollars.

Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedThen there was a steep increase from $300k to $510k in 2012.
Corrected numerical format and improved clarity.

When it comes to country C ,costs for housing gradually rose from 100k dollars to about 250k dollars in 2007 until it fell to 120k dollars in 2009. In following years the figure experienced a slight rise and reached its high of $280 in 2013 and then it decreased to approximately 260k dollars in 2014

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedIn Country C, housing costs gradually rose from $100k to about $250k in 2007, before falling to $120k in 2009.
Improved sentence structure and clarity.

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Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a logical sequence, but there are some issues with paragraphing and linking words.

Suggestions

Use more linking words to connect ideas.
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
Improve paragraph transitions.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedThe prices in Country A dramatically increased at the beginning of the period, while those in Countries B and C rose gradually.
Clarified sentence structure and improved parallelism.
RevisedMeanwhile, all figures fluctuated until they stabilized towards the end of the period.
Used more precise vocabulary and improved sentence clarity.
RevisedIn Country C, housing costs gradually rose from $100k to about $250k in 2007, before falling to $120k in 2009.
Improved sentence structure and clarity.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 5.0/ 9

There are several grammatical errors that affect the clarity and accuracy of the essay.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedAfter four years of decrease, it started increasing and reached about $600k in 2007.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved clarity.
RevisedThe last seven-year period was one of stagnation, with the average house price around $560k.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.
RevisedThen there was a steep increase from $300k to $510k in 2012.
Corrected numerical format and improved clarity.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary, though some words are used inaccurately or repetitively.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedThe average house prices in Country A gradually rose from around $150k to approximately $200k in 2000, before climbing steeply to around $550k in 2003.
Corrected inaccuracies and improved precision.
RevisedThe figures for Country B showed a similar upward trend, gradually increasing from $200k to $250k in 2006, before experiencing a downward trend until 2009.
Corrected numerical inaccuracies and improved clarity.
RevisedIn the following years, the figure experienced a slight rise, reaching a high of $280k in 2013, before decreasing to approximately $260k in 2014.
Improved sentence structure and numerical accuracy.

Task achievement

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task and describes the main trends, but some details are inaccurate.

Suggestions

Ensure numerical data is accurate.
Include more specific data points.
Clarify trends and comparisons.

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