Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #19, band 5.5

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206 words. Marked by Axiom on 4 August 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

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Average house prices (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (thousand dollars)
	Country A	Country B	Country C
1997	150	125	100
1998	175	200	125
1999	200	225	125
2000	200	250	150
2001	300	275	150
2002	400	300	150
2003	550	300	175
2004	500	325	175
2005	475	375	200
2006	450	300	200
2007	500	275	225
2008	550	275	150
2009	600	375	250
2010	600	475	275
2011	600	500	275
2012	625	525	300
2013	600	500	300
2014	625	500	275

Academic Task 1206 words

The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014.

The line graph provides information about the average housing prices in three countries over a period of 17 years.

Overall, house prices were increased in 17 years in three countries. In 1997, home price was similar all 3 countries. But home prices was dramatically increasing from 2001 to 2004 in country A. The prices was stable for accommodation in 11 years in country B. By 2008, house prices have seen a very high increase in 2 years.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedOverall, house prices increased over the 17-year period in all three countries.
The revised sentence is clearer and more concise.
Lexical resource
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RevisedIn 1997, the home prices were similar across all three countries.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical error and improves clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedHowever, home prices dramatically increased from 2001 to 2004 in Country A.
Using 'However' instead of 'But' is more formal and appropriate for academic writing.
Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedHouse prices remained stable for 11 years in Country B.
The revised sentence is clearer and corrects the grammatical error.

In 1997, home price was 250 thousands dollars in country A. These prices rose slowly, and by 2001, they had risen sharply. In 2004, prices was 600 thousands dollars in country A. In 2014, this price reached its peak with approximately 750 thousands dollars.

Lexical resource
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RevisedThese prices rose gradually, and by 2001, they had increased sharply.
Using 'gradually' instead of 'slowly' adds variety to the vocabulary.

Country B also had the same house prices as country A in 1997. These prices were around 250,000 dollars until 2008. By 2009, these prices had doubled, and they remained the same until 2014. In 1997, house price was 125 thousands dollars in country C. This prices rose slowly and by 2007 reached 250,000 dollars. In 2008, price fell very sharply with 125 thousands dollars. However prices increased again starting in 2008, reaching 250,000 dollars in 2009, and these prices remained virtually unchanged until 2014.

Lexical resource
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RevisedThese prices rose gradually and by 2007 reached $250,000.
Corrects the grammatical error and uses a more precise term.
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RevisedIn 2008, prices fell sharply to $125,000.
The revised sentence is clearer and corrects the grammatical error.

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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay is generally coherent with a logical structure, but some sentences lack clarity and smooth transitions.

Suggestions

Use more linking words to improve flow.
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
Clarify any ambiguous statements.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, house prices increased over the 17-year period in all three countries.
The revised sentence is clearer and more concise.
RevisedHowever, home prices dramatically increased from 2001 to 2004 in Country A.
Using 'However' instead of 'But' is more formal and appropriate for academic writing.
RevisedHouse prices remained stable for 11 years in Country B.
The revised sentence is clearer and corrects the grammatical error.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay contains several grammatical errors, affecting the clarity and accuracy of the information.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedHowever, home prices dramatically increased from 2001 to 2004 in Country A.
Corrects the subject-verb agreement error.
RevisedHouse prices remained stable for 11 years in Country B.
Corrects the subject-verb agreement error.
RevisedThese prices rose gradually and by 2007 reached $250,000.
Corrects the subject-verb agreement error.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but there are some repetitive phrases and minor errors.

Sentence revisions 4

RevisedIn 1997, the home prices were similar across all three countries.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical error and improves clarity.
RevisedThese prices rose gradually, and by 2001, they had increased sharply.
Using 'gradually' instead of 'slowly' adds variety to the vocabulary.
RevisedThese prices rose gradually and by 2007 reached $250,000.
Corrects the grammatical error and uses a more precise term.
RevisedIn 2008, prices fell sharply to $125,000.
The revised sentence is clearer and corrects the grammatical error.

Task achievement

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task and describes the main trends, but lacks detailed analysis and some inaccuracies are present.

Suggestions

Include more detailed comparisons between the countries.
Ensure accuracy in describing the data.
Highlight key trends and changes over time.

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