Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #18, band 5.5

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174 words. Marked by Axiom on 2 August 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

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Values in thousand dollars. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.

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Average house prices (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (thousand dollars)
	Country A	Country B	Country C
1997	150	125	100
1998	175	200	125
1999	200	225	125
2000	200	250	150
2001	300	275	150
2002	400	300	150
2003	550	300	175
2004	500	325	175
2005	475	375	200
2006	450	300	200
2007	500	275	225
2008	550	275	150
2009	600	375	250
2010	600	475	275
2011	600	500	275
2012	625	525	300
2013	600	500	300
2014	625	500	275

Academic Task 1174 words

The graph shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014

The line graph illustrates the average prices of houses in three variable countries (Country A, Country B, and Country C from 1997 to 2014.

Lexical resource
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RevisedThe line graph illustrates the average house prices in three different countries (Country A, Country B, and Country C) from 1997 to 2014.
Improved vocabulary and clarity.

Overall, the house prices of all countries saw a gradual increase with some changes except the Country A. However, there was a noticeable decrease in country C’s apartment cost rather than the rest. In the final year, the household cost in all three countries was higher than in the first year.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedOverall, the house prices in all countries, except Country A, saw a gradual increase with some fluctuations.
Clarified the exception and improved sentence structure.
Lexical resource
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RevisedBy the final year, the average house prices in all three countries were higher than in 1997.
Used more precise vocabulary.

In the first year, household costs were the same in the countries, which were just under 250 thousand dollars. Among all, Country A has risen significantly from 200 thousand to 750 thousand dollars between 1997 and 2014, the same figure for Country B was 500 thousand dollars in 2014 with a significant increase from 2008 to 2009 from 250 to 500 thousand dollars. The cost of apartments in Country C rose gradually from the beginning to the final year(200 thousand and 250 thousand, accordingly), apart from the year of 2008 when the prices fell by almost 50 thousand dollars.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedIn 1997, the average house prices in all three countries were just under 250 thousand dollars.
Clarified the time reference and improved sentence clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedCountry A's house prices rose significantly from 200 thousand to 750 thousand dollars between 1997 and 2014. Similarly, Country B's prices increased to 500 thousand dollars by 2014, with a notable rise from 250 to 500 thousand dollars between 2008 and 2009.
Separated into two sentences for clarity and coherence.
Lexical resource
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RevisedThe house prices in Country C gradually increased from 200 thousand to 250 thousand dollars, except in 2008 when they dropped by almost 50 thousand dollars.
Clarified and improved word choice.

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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a generally logical order, but lacks clear paragraphing and some transitions are missing.

Suggestions

Use clear paragraphing to separate different points.
Add more linking words to improve flow.
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, the house prices in all countries, except Country A, saw a gradual increase with some fluctuations.
Clarified the exception and improved sentence structure.
RevisedIn 1997, the average house prices in all three countries were just under 250 thousand dollars.
Clarified the time reference and improved sentence clarity.
RevisedCountry A's house prices rose significantly from 200 thousand to 750 thousand dollars between 1997 and 2014. Similarly, Country B's prices increased to 500 thousand dollars by 2014, with a notable rise from 250 to 500 thousand dollars between 2008 and 2009.
Separated into two sentences for clarity and coherence.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay contains some grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.

Sentence revisions 2

RevisedOverall, house prices in all countries, except for Country A, saw a gradual increase with some fluctuations.
Corrected article usage and improved sentence structure.
RevisedThe house prices in Country C gradually increased from 200 thousand to 250 thousand dollars, except in 2008 when they dropped by almost 50 thousand dollars.
Corrected sentence structure and improved clarity.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some word choices are repetitive or inaccurate.

Sentence revisions 4

RevisedOverall, house prices in all countries experienced a gradual increase with some fluctuations, except for Country A.
Improved vocabulary and clarity.
RevisedBy the final year, the average house prices in all three countries were higher than in 1997.
Used more precise vocabulary.
RevisedThe house prices in Country C gradually increased from 200 thousand to 250 thousand dollars, except in 2008 when they dropped by almost 50 thousand dollars.
Clarified and improved word choice.
RevisedThe line graph illustrates the average house prices in three different countries (Country A, Country B, and Country C) from 1997 to 2014.
Improved vocabulary and clarity.

Task achievement

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and some inaccuracies are present.

Suggestions

Provide more detailed analysis of the trends.
Ensure all data is accurately represented.
Include more comparisons between the countries.

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