Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #20, band 6.0
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209 words. Marked by Axiom on 4 August 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The line graph this answer describes
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| Country A | Country B | Country C | |
|---|---|---|---|
| 1997 | 150 | 125 | 100 |
| 1998 | 175 | 200 | 125 |
| 1999 | 200 | 225 | 125 |
| 2000 | 200 | 250 | 150 |
| 2001 | 300 | 275 | 150 |
| 2002 | 400 | 300 | 150 |
| 2003 | 550 | 300 | 175 |
| 2004 | 500 | 325 | 175 |
| 2005 | 475 | 375 | 200 |
| 2006 | 450 | 300 | 200 |
| 2007 | 500 | 275 | 225 |
| 2008 | 550 | 275 | 150 |
| 2009 | 600 | 375 | 250 |
| 2010 | 600 | 475 | 275 |
| 2011 | 600 | 500 | 275 |
| 2012 | 625 | 525 | 300 |
| 2013 | 600 | 500 | 300 |
| 2014 | 625 | 500 | 275 |
Academic Task 1209 words
The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014.
The line graph provides information about the average housing prices in three countries over a period of 17 years.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, house prices increased over the 17-year period in all three countries.
Clarified the time period and ensured parallel structure.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn 1997, home prices were similar across all three countries.
Improved clarity and consistency in number format.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedHowever, home prices dramatically increased in Country A from 2001 to 2004.
Improved sentence structure and coherence.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe prices remained stable for 11 years in Country B.
Simplified and clarified the sentence.
Lexical resource
RevisedBy 2008, house prices had experienced a significant increase over two years.
Used more precise vocabulary and consistent number format.
In 1997, the home price was 250 thousand dollars in country A. In 2014, this price reached its peak at approximately 750 thousand dollars.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThese prices rose slowly, but by 2001, they had increased sharply.
Corrected the conjunction to better reflect the contrast.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn 2004, prices in Country A reached 600,000 dollars.
Improved sentence clarity and consistency in number format.
Country B also had the same house prices as country A in 1997. These prices were around 250,000 dollars until 2008. By 2009, these prices had doubled, and they remained the same until 2014. In 2008, the price fell very sharply by 125 thousand dollars.
Lexical resource
RevisedIn 1997, the house price in Country C was 125,000 dollars.
Improved sentence structure and consistency in number format.
Lexical resource
RevisedThese prices gradually rose, reaching 250,000 dollars by 2007.
Enhanced vocabulary for gradual change.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedHowever, prices increased again starting in 2008, reaching 250,000 dollars by 2009, and remained virtually unchanged until 2014.
Improved sentence flow and clarity.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay presents information in a logical order, but lacks clear connections between some points.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
- Improve transitions between paragraphs.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, house prices increased over the 17-year period in all three countries.
Clarified the time period and ensured parallel structure.
RevisedIn 1997, home prices were similar across all three countries.
Improved clarity and consistency in number format.
RevisedHowever, home prices dramatically increased in Country A from 2001 to 2004.
Improved sentence structure and coherence.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures, but contains some errors.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThese prices rose slowly, but by 2001, they had increased sharply.
Corrected the conjunction to better reflect the contrast.
RevisedIn 2004, prices in Country A reached 600,000 dollars.
Improved sentence clarity and consistency in number format.
RevisedHowever, prices increased again starting in 2008, reaching 250,000 dollars by 2009, and remained virtually unchanged until 2014.
Improved sentence flow and clarity.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but lacks variety and precision in some areas.
Sentence revisions 4
RevisedThe prices remained stable for 11 years in Country B.
Simplified and clarified the sentence.
RevisedBy 2008, house prices had experienced a significant increase over two years.
Used more precise vocabulary and consistent number format.
RevisedThese prices gradually rose, reaching 250,000 dollars by 2007.
Enhanced vocabulary for gradual change.
RevisedIn 1997, the house price in Country C was 125,000 dollars.
Improved sentence structure and consistency in number format.
Task achievement
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task and includes relevant information from the graph, but lacks some detailed comparisons.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between the countries.
- Highlight key trends more clearly.
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