Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #10, band 6.0

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136 words. Marked by Axiom on 29 June 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

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Values in thousand dollars. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.

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Average house prices (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (thousand dollars)
	Country A	Country B	Country C
1997	150	125	100
1998	175	200	125
1999	200	225	125
2000	200	250	150
2001	300	275	150
2002	400	300	150
2003	550	300	175
2004	500	325	175
2005	475	375	200
2006	450	300	200
2007	500	275	225
2008	550	275	150
2009	600	375	250
2010	600	475	275
2011	600	500	275
2012	625	525	300
2013	600	500	300
2014	625	500	275

Academic Task 1136 words

The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The given line graph illustrates the changes in accommodation prices in three different countries from 1997 to 2014.

Lexical resource
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RevisedThe line graph illustrates the changes in housing prices across three countries from 1997 to 2014.
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Overall, it is evident that, country A generally had higher housing costs, followed by country B, country C remained at bottom, despite a gradual increase.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedOverall, it is evident that country A generally had higher housing costs, followed by country B, while country C remained at the bottom despite a gradual increase.
Improved sentence structure for clarity.

In 1997, country A had about 230 dollars then increased almost 550 dollars in 2004. Additionally, this country fluctuated until 2014, and reached 750 dollars in 2004. Moreover county B also had 230 dollars in 1997 which slowly increased to approximately 260 dollars in 2004. Then it dropped to 250 dollars in 2008, rose again to 500 dollars in 2009, and remained stable at that level until 2014. Furthermore, country C had a value of approximately 180 dollars in 1997, then gradually increased to 250 dollars by 2007 and remained unchanged until 2014.

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RevisedIn 1997, country A had about 230 dollars, which increased to almost 550 dollars by 2004.
Added a comma for better readability and clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedAdditionally, this country's prices fluctuated until 2014, reaching 750 dollars by the end of the period.
Clarified the timeline and corrected the year.
Lexical resource
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RevisedMoreover, country B also started at 230 dollars in 1997, slowly increasing to approximately 260 dollars by 2004.
Added a comma and rephrased for clarity.
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RevisedFurthermore, country C's prices were approximately 180 dollars in 1997, gradually increasing to 250 dollars by 2007, and remained unchanged until 2014.
Improved sentence structure for clarity.

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Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a logical order, but there are some issues with clarity and flow.

Suggestions

Use more linking words to connect ideas.
Ensure consistency in data reporting.
Clarify the timeline of events.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, it is evident that country A generally had higher housing costs, followed by country B, while country C remained at the bottom despite a gradual increase.
Improved sentence structure for clarity.
RevisedIn 1997, country A had about 230 dollars, which increased to almost 550 dollars by 2004.
Added a comma for better readability and clarity.
RevisedAdditionally, this country's prices fluctuated until 2014, reaching 750 dollars by the end of the period.
Clarified the timeline and corrected the year.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures but contains some errors.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedIn 1997, country A had about 230 dollars, which increased to almost 550 dollars by 2004.
Corrected the sentence structure for grammatical accuracy.
RevisedAdditionally, this country's prices fluctuated until 2014, reaching 750 dollars by the end of the period.
Corrected the timeline and grammatical structure.
RevisedMoreover, country B also started at 230 dollars in 1997, slowly increasing to approximately 260 dollars by 2004.
Added a comma and corrected the grammatical structure.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The vocabulary used is adequate but lacks variety and precision.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedThe line graph illustrates the changes in housing prices across three countries from 1997 to 2014.
Simplified language for clarity.
RevisedMoreover, country B also started at 230 dollars in 1997, slowly increasing to approximately 260 dollars by 2004.
Added a comma and rephrased for clarity.
RevisedFurthermore, country C's prices were approximately 180 dollars in 1997, gradually increasing to 250 dollars by 2007, and remained unchanged until 2014.
Improved sentence structure for clarity.

Task achievement

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task but lacks detail and precision in data reporting.

Suggestions

Include more specific data points.
Ensure all years are accurately reported.
Provide a clearer comparison between countries.

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