Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #22, band 7.5
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200 words. Marked by Axiom on 14 August 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The line graph this answer describes
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| Country A | Country B | Country C | |
|---|---|---|---|
| 1997 | 150 | 125 | 100 |
| 1998 | 175 | 200 | 125 |
| 1999 | 200 | 225 | 125 |
| 2000 | 200 | 250 | 150 |
| 2001 | 300 | 275 | 150 |
| 2002 | 400 | 300 | 150 |
| 2003 | 550 | 300 | 175 |
| 2004 | 500 | 325 | 175 |
| 2005 | 475 | 375 | 200 |
| 2006 | 450 | 300 | 200 |
| 2007 | 500 | 275 | 225 |
| 2008 | 550 | 275 | 150 |
| 2009 | 600 | 375 | 250 |
| 2010 | 600 | 475 | 275 |
| 2011 | 600 | 500 | 275 |
| 2012 | 625 | 525 | 300 |
| 2013 | 600 | 500 | 300 |
| 2014 | 625 | 500 | 275 |
Academic Task 1200 words
The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph compares the average house prices in three countries from 1997 to 2014.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, house prices increased in all three countries, with Country A experiencing the most significant rise.
Simplified the sentence for clarity and removed unnecessary quotation marks.
In Country A, the average price for houses was initially under $250,000.
Lexical resource
RevisedHouse prices rose steadily until 2004, reaching around $550,000.
Replaced 'climbed' with 'rose' to avoid repetition and improve lexical variety.
Lexical resource
RevisedDespite a slight decline between 2004 and 2008, prices surged to nearly $750,000 by 2011.
Rephrased for variety and clarity.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn the final years, prices continued to grow; however, they did not surpass the $750,000 mark.
Corrected the use of 'it' to 'prices' for subject-verb agreement.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn 1997, house prices in Countries B and C were also below $250,000.
Rephrased for clarity and conciseness.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedHouse prices in Country B began to rise and continued to do so until 2004, before declining to $250,000 in 2008.
Clarified sentence structure for better readability.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe following year, prices doubled to $500,000 and remained stable for the next five years.
Clarified the time frame and simplified the sentence structure.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedMeanwhile, prices in Country C increased from approximately $120,000 in 1997 to about $250,000 in 2007.
Improved consistency in the use of approximate figures.
Lexical resource
RevisedHouse prices then dipped to $120,000 before recovering in 2009, continuing to rise until 2013, and then dropping to $250,000 by 2014.
Rephrased for clarity and to avoid repetition.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is generally well-organized with clear paragraphing and logical progression of ideas. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more varied linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
- Improve transitions between paragraphs.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, house prices increased in all three countries, with Country A experiencing the most significant rise.
Simplified the sentence for clarity and removed unnecessary quotation marks.
RevisedIn 1997, house prices in Countries B and C were also below $250,000.
Rephrased for clarity and conciseness.
RevisedThe following year, prices doubled to $500,000 and remained stable for the next five years.
Clarified the time frame and simplified the sentence structure.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIn the final years, prices continued to grow; however, they did not surpass the $750,000 mark.
Corrected the use of 'it' to 'prices' for subject-verb agreement.
RevisedMeanwhile, prices in Country C increased from approximately $120,000 in 1997 to about $250,000 in 2007.
Improved consistency in the use of approximate figures.
RevisedHouse prices in Country B began to rise and continued to do so until 2004, before declining to $250,000 in 2008.
Clarified sentence structure for better readability.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriate for the task, though some repetition is present.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedHouse prices rose steadily until 2004, reaching around $550,000.
Replaced 'climbed' with 'rose' to avoid repetition and improve lexical variety.
RevisedDespite a slight decline between 2004 and 2008, prices surged to nearly $750,000 by 2011.
Rephrased for variety and clarity.
RevisedHouse prices then dipped to $120,000 before recovering in 2009, continuing to rise until 2013, and then dropping to $250,000 by 2014.
Rephrased for clarity and to avoid repetition.
Task achievement
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay effectively summarizes the main features and makes relevant comparisons, but could include more specific data points.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points for better illustration.
- Ensure all trends are clearly described.
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