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Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #33, band 7.5

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The line graph this answer describes

Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Japan, US, China, India for 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, 2010, 2012, in % of Australian exports. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0102030199019952000200520102012
Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Japan, US, China, India for 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, 2010, 2012, in % of Australian exports. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0102030199020002010
Values in % of Australian exports. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
Show the data
Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (% of Australian exports)
JapanUSChinaIndia
1990261121
199520831
2000181151
2005188115
2010175257
2012177285

Academic Task 1173 words

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian export to four countries from 1990 to 2012

It's also clear that the figure for Australian exports to China rose dramatically, experiencing the biggest percentage change.

  1. Lexical resource

    RevisedThe graph illustrates the proportion of Australian exports to four countries: Japan, the US, China, and India, from 1990 to 2012.

    Clarified the list of countries and time frame for precision.

  2. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOverall, while the percentage of Australian exports to China and India increased, the opposite trend was observed for Japan and the US.

    The word 'reverse' was replaced with 'opposite trend' for clarity.

In 1990, the proportion of Australian exports to China started with approximately 3% and increased significantly to around 28%,

  1. Lexical resource

    Revisedmaking China Australia's largest export market by the end of the period.

    'Market' is a more precise term in this context.

  2. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedMoreover, the export rate of Australia to India remained relatively stable from 1990 to 2000, followed by a considerable rise from 1% to 8% by 2010.

    Simplified sentence structure for better flow.

In contrast, Australian export figures for Japan started at 27% with the highest proportion in 1990, which then declined slightly to 18% in 2012.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedThe volume of Australian exports to the US fluctuated considerably over the years, eventually settling at around 6% in the final year.

    Replaced 'wildly' with 'considerably' for more formal tone.

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Coherence & cohesion

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay is logically structured with clear progression of ideas. However, some transitions between sentences could be smoother.

Suggestions

  • Use more varied linking words to enhance flow.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
  • Avoid abrupt shifts in focus.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, while the percentage of Australian exports to China and India increased, the opposite trend was observed for Japan and the US.

    The word 'reverse' was replaced with 'opposite trend' for clarity.

  • RevisedMoreover, the export rate of Australia to India remained relatively stable from 1990 to 2000, followed by a considerable rise from 1% to 8% by 2010.

    Simplified sentence structure for better flow.

  • RevisedThe volume of Australian exports to the US fluctuated considerably over the years, eventually settling at around 6% in the final year.

    Replaced 'wildly' with 'considerably' for more formal tone.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, while the percentage of Australian exports to China and India increased, the opposite trend was observed for Japan and the US.

    Corrected tense consistency.

  • Revisedthe export rate of Australia to India remained relatively stable from 1990 to 2000, followed by a considerable rise from 1% to 8% by 2010.

    Simplified sentence structure for clarity.

  • RevisedThe volume of Australian exports to the US fluctuated considerably over the years, eventually settling at around 6% in the final year.

    Improved word choice for a more formal tone.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, though some word choices could be improved for precision and variety.

Sentence revisions 4

  • RevisedThe graph illustrates the proportion of Australian exports to four countries: Japan, the US, China, and India, from 1990 to 2012.

    Clarified the list of countries and time frame for precision.

  • Revisedmaking China Australia's largest export market by the end of the period.

    'Market' is a more precise term in this context.

  • Revisedthe opposite trend was observed for Japan and the US.

    'Opposite trend' is a more precise and formal expression.

  • Revisedthe percentage stabilized at approximately 6% by the final year.

    'Stabilized' is a more precise term than 'settled.'

Task achievement

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay effectively addresses the task, summarizing key trends and providing relevant data.

Suggestions

  • Include more specific data points for clarity.
  • Ensure all key trends are highlighted.
  • Avoid unnecessary repetition.

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