Energy sources in Australia: IELTS Task 1 answer #9, band 5.0
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220 words. Marked by Axiom on 7 January 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The pie chart this answer describes
Show the data
| Share | |
|---|---|
| Coal | 39 |
| Oil | 32.5 |
| Gas | 22.9 |
| Other | 3.8 |
| Solar | 1.3 |
| Wind | 0.3 |
| Hydro | 0.2 |
| Share | |
|---|---|
| Coal | 27 |
| Oil | 35.5 |
| Gas | 32 |
| Other | 3.6 |
| Geothermal | 4.3 |
| Wind | 1.2 |
| Hydro | 0.7 |
Academic Task 1220 words
The pie charts show energy sources in Australia in 2008 and predictions for 2030 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The graphs show information about energy sources in Australia in 2008 and prediction for 2030.
In 2030, , whereas renewable energy sources are projected to increase, but they will remain small function again.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, in 2008, coal dominated Australia’s energy sources, while oil and gas also supplied significant shares. In contrast, renewable energy accounted for a small portion.
The sentence was revised for clarity and to correct grammatical errors.
Grammar & accuracy
Revisedit is predicted that coal’s contribution will decline
The sentence was corrected for proper verb tense and structure.
Coal was the largest energy source, at 39.00, followed by oil at 32.50%. however renewable energy sources contribute a small shares. Solar supplies only 0.80%, wind made up 0.30% and hydro did 0.20% of Australia’s energy production. Meanwhile, other sources accounted fro 4.30%, which was higher than the total contribution from all renewable Energy sources.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn 2008, most energy sources were derived from fossil fuels, such as coal, gas, and oil.
The sentence was revised for clarity and grammatical accuracy.
to 32.00% and 35.00% respectively, while coal is forecasted to fall to 22.30%. Among renewable sources, , by contrast, geothermal source will predicted to grow to 4.30%. to 0.90% and 0.70 respectively. at 4.30%.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedBy 2030, significant changes are predicted in the distribution of energy sources, particularly between fossil fuels and renewable sources.
The sentence was revised to improve clarity and coherence.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedProportions of gas and oil are projected to go up
The verb tense was corrected.
Lexical resource
Revisedsolar energy will disappear
The phrase was corrected for proper verb usage.
Lexical resource
RevisedWind and hydro are projected to rise slightly
The words were corrected for spelling and proper usage.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThe contribution of other sources is forecasted to remain stable
The sentence was corrected for subject-verb agreement and word choice.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear paragraphing and topic sentences. Transitions between ideas are not always smooth.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing to separate different ideas.
- Include topic sentences to introduce each paragraph.
- Use linking words to improve flow between sentences.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, in 2008, coal dominated Australia’s energy sources, while oil and gas also supplied significant shares. In contrast, renewable energy accounted for a small portion.
The sentence was revised for clarity and to correct grammatical errors.
RevisedIn 2008, most energy sources were derived from fossil fuels, such as coal, gas, and oil.
The sentence was revised for clarity and grammatical accuracy.
RevisedBy 2030, significant changes are predicted in the distribution of energy sources, particularly between fossil fuels and renewable sources.
The sentence was revised to improve clarity and coherence.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay contains several grammatical errors, including incorrect verb tenses and sentence structures.
Sentence revisions 3
Revisedit is predicted that coal’s contribution will decline
The sentence was corrected for proper verb tense and structure.
RevisedProportions of gas and oil are projected to go up
The verb tense was corrected.
RevisedThe contribution of other sources is forecasted to remain stable
The sentence was corrected for subject-verb agreement and word choice.
Lexical resource
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and incorrect word choices.
Sentence revisions 3
Revisedcoal dominated Australia’s energy sources
The phrase was corrected for proper word usage.
Revisedsolar energy will disappear
The phrase was corrected for proper verb usage.
RevisedWind and hydro are projected to rise slightly
The words were corrected for spelling and proper usage.
Task achievement
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed comparisons and some inaccuracies are present.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons between 2008 and 2030.
- Ensure accuracy in reporting data from the charts.
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