Energy sources in Australia: IELTS Task 1 answer #10, band 6.0
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206 words. Marked by Axiom on 8 January 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The pie chart this answer describes
Show the data
| Share | |
|---|---|
| Coal | 39 |
| Oil | 32.5 |
| Gas | 22.9 |
| Other | 3.8 |
| Solar | 1.3 |
| Wind | 0.3 |
| Hydro | 0.2 |
| Share | |
|---|---|
| Coal | 27 |
| Oil | 35.5 |
| Gas | 32 |
| Other | 3.6 |
| Geothermal | 4.3 |
| Wind | 1.2 |
| Hydro | 0.7 |
Academic Task 1206 words
The pie charts show energy sources in Australia in 2008 and predictions for 2030 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The chart gives the information about seven types of energy sources in Australia from 2008 to 2030 with future predictions. The figures are measured by percentage.
Overall, almost all of the energy supplies experience growth in their proportions, except coal. It is predicted that solar energy will disappear in the future whereas geothermal energy will be used.
In 2008, Australia’s energy courses mainly depended on fossil fuels. Namely, coal oil and gas. Coal was dominant in the energy field with 39.00% while oil and gas had great proportions ( 32.50% and 22.90% respectively) while renewable courses played a minimal role. Hydro contributed with 0.20%, wind made up 0.30% and solar stood at 0.80%. Their overall contribution was 1.30% for energy field in Australis.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedOthers made up 4.30%, which was significantly higher than the overall proportion of renewable energies.
Added a comma for clarity and corrected article usage.
It is forecasted that fossil fuels encounter main changes in 2030. Coal will experience a significant reduction 16.7% while oil and gas rose ( 2% and approximately 10% respectively). Wind and hydro will experience changes whereas others remained at 4.30% the same as geothermal which will emerge in 2030.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAdditionally, a new type of renewable energy, geothermal, will emerge.
Improved sentence structure and punctuation.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedSolar energy is not mentioned in the future prediction.
Corrected grammatical error and clarified the statement.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay presents information in a logical order, but some comparisons and transitions are unclear or missing.
Suggestions
- Improve transitions between sentences.
- Clarify comparisons between 2008 and 2030.
- Ensure all relevant data is mentioned.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIn 2008, coal was the dominant energy source, accounting for 39.00% of the total.
Clarified the sentence structure for better understanding.
RevisedSolar energy is not mentioned in the future prediction.
Corrected grammatical error and clarified the statement.
RevisedAdditionally, a new type of renewable energy, geothermal, will emerge.
Improved sentence structure and punctuation.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedSolar energy is not mentioned in the future prediction.
Corrected the grammatical error by adding 'be'.
RevisedAdditionally, a new type of renewable energy, geothermal, will emerge.
Corrected pluralization and punctuation errors.
RevisedOthers made up 4.30%, which was significantly higher than the overall proportion of renewable energies.
Added a comma for clarity and corrected article usage.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision in some areas.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe chart provides information about seven types of energy sources.
Replaced 'gives' with 'provides' for more precise language.
RevisedCoal was the predominant energy source.
Used a more precise term to describe coal's role.
RevisedIt is forecasted that fossil fuels will undergo significant changes.
Improved vocabulary for clarity and precision.
Task achievement
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed comparisons and some inaccuracies are present.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data from the charts is accurately reported.
- Provide more detailed comparisons between 2008 and 2030.
- Clarify the disappearance of solar energy and emergence of geothermal energy.
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