University or a job after school: IELTS Task 2 essay #27, band 6.5
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300 words. Marked by Axiom on 3 May 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2300 words
Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school.
People have different views as to whether that studying at university or college is the most reliable way to a successful job, while others believe that starting work immediately after school is more practical. From my perspective it is better to choice to university or college.
Although there are some exceptions, it is not very common to see people to succeed without education than graduate in professional careers.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOne perspective is that people choose higher education because it distinguishes them from others.
The revised sentence is more concise and clear.
Lexical resource
RevisedIn most cases, this is true, as university education supports individuals in gaining deeper knowledge and enhancing critical thinking skills.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and natural phrasing of the idea.
Lexical resource
RevisedIt also enables students to specialise in their chosen field, potentially leading to enhanced career prospects in the future.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and precise phrasing of the idea.
This decision is often related to financial problems in the family, so young people feel responsible to support themselves. In addition, it can depend on where a person lives. For example, in some regions like parts of my town in Namangan, it is normal for some people to learn a practical skill or start working immediately.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOn the other hand, some individuals opt to start working straight after school to begin earning money sooner.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and precise expression of the idea.
Lexical resource
RevisedNevertheless, possessing a skill is highly beneficial, as it enables individuals to earn an income and achieve independence.
The revised sentence provides a more precise and formal phrasing of the idea.
Having considered both views, I believed that university is suitable for who want to understand their field deeper. However, studying only to get a diploma is not a right approach. I believe it is better when students focus on learning seriously and try to get work experience before the graduation.
Overall, both viewpoints are useful, but having good thereotical knowledge is the most effective way to succeed.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn conclusion, while gaining employment immediately after school may be necessary for financial reasons, higher education often offers better career prospects.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone, which is more suitable for an IELTS essay.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the progression of ideas a bit difficult to follow. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and clearly stating the writer's position.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
- Make sure to fully develop your conclusion to effectively summarize the main points and clearly state your position.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOne perspective is that people choose higher education because it distinguishes them from others.
The revised sentence is more concise and clear.
RevisedOn the other hand, some individuals opt to start working straight after school to begin earning money sooner.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and precise expression of the idea.
RevisedIn conclusion, while gaining employment immediately after school may be necessary for financial reasons, higher education often offers better career prospects.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone, which is more suitable for an IELTS essay.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a variety of complex structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions that can be revised for clarity and accuracy. The essay demonstrates a good command of a range of grammatical structures, with some errors in accuracy and punctuation. More complex sentence structures could be used to demonstrate a higher level of grammatical control and accuracy.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedFrom one perspective, people often choose higher education as it is believed to differentiate them from others.
The revised sentence corrects the misuse of 'most' and provides a more natural phrasing.
RevisedOn the contrary, some individuals prefer to start working immediately after school to begin earning money.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and precise phrasing of the idea.
RevisedIn conclusion, while working after school may be necessary for financial reasons, higher education generally offers better career prospects.
The revised sentence corrects the misuse of 'necessity' and provides a more formal and precise phrasing of the idea.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good command of a broad lexical resource. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, with some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be revised for clarity and precision. Additionally, the use of more formal language throughout the essay would be more appropriate for the task.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIn most cases, this is true, as university education supports individuals in gaining deeper knowledge and enhancing critical thinking skills.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and natural phrasing of the idea.
RevisedIt also enables students to specialise in their chosen field, potentially leading to enhanced career prospects in the future.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and precise phrasing of the idea.
RevisedNevertheless, possessing a skill is highly beneficial, as it enables individuals to earn an income and achieve independence.
The revised sentence provides a more precise and formal phrasing of the idea.
Task response
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position and supporting it with relevant examples. However, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and clearly stating the writer's position.
Suggestions
- Ensure that your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and clearly states your position.
- Provide more specific examples to support your arguments.
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