Team activities and life skills: IELTS Task 2 essay #7, band 6.5

There is a debate over which activities are better with something that collaborative tasks can teach practical life skills, and others proposing that they might be taught through exercises performed individually. I completely agree with the former opinion, as teamwork can foster both leadership and negotiating skills.

On the one hand, working alone is better to concentrate on the task. This is because whenever a person works with a group, there is always noisy environment that disturbs focus. To avoid frequent distractions, finding a peaceful place and completing all exercises is the best way out. Moreover, accomplishing everything independently can offer faster decision-making. Despite consulting with the group, and then you ritual can make decisions quickly, streaming the work process. Thereby, both focus and quick decision-making are the main features that can be needed in crucial life situations such as completing all the tasks at work on time and so on.

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   RevisedThis is because when a person works with a group, there is often a noisy environment that can disturb their focus.

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   RevisedDespite the need to consult with the group, working alone can allow for quicker decision-making, thus streamlining the work process.

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On the other hand, group activities can benefit people more, as the shape a personality of a good employee. There isn't for this is that with the team, people can foster their leadership skills. For example, in a group project, someone can take the lead and organizing the tasks ensuring deadlines are met, and resolving any conflicts within the team; boosting skills of a leader. Furthermore, teamwork can improve negotiation between the group's participants. Although there may be some disagreements in the group, having a conversation may improve this state. If people converse, they can come to a final decision of a debate, hence improving their abilities of leading conversations.

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   RevisedOn the other hand, group activities can be more beneficial as they help shape the personality of a good employee.

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   RevisedThis is because with a team, people can foster and enhance their leadership skills.

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In conclusion, the issue of what is better working in the group or alone has sparked considerable debate. While some people say that working alone can teach individuals important life skills, I strongly believe that group activities can improve leadership skills as well as the way of negotiating with others, making it more crucial for many life situations.