Team activities and life skills: IELTS Task 2 essay #18, band 7.0
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336 words. Marked by Axiom on 26 February 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2336 words
Roup or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone. Do you agree or disagree?
Lexical resource
RevisedIt is widely believed that the most important life skills are often acquired through group activities; however, some individuals prefer to learn these skills independently.
The revised sentence is more clear and direct, and the use of 'life skills' instead of 'important skills for live' provides a more accurate expression.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedI strongly agree that a significant number of important skills are best learned through team-working.
The revised sentence corrects the article usage and provides a more accurate expression.
For example, learning new language demands more concentration and time. Hence, they are done alone, especially during memorizing vocabulary and enhancing reading and listening skills. Secondly, working or learning alone can make people independent and it can develop confidence. Consequently, after learning alone, any person can overcome any problems which are related to discipline and time-management. When someone try to read any articles or books without anyone, it helps people to analyse and develop critical thinking.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOn the one hand, there are several reasons to support the idea that some important skills are best learned through individual activities.
The revised sentence is more clear and concise, and the use of 'several' instead of 'many' provides a more formal tone.
Lexical resource
RevisedFirstly, individuals working alone are less likely to be distracted and can therefore be more productive.
The revised sentence is more clear and natural, and the use of 'less likely to be distracted' and 'more productive' provides a more accurate expression.
The more they work with their group, the more the group teaches cooperation and interaction. It will be helpful, especially, for future career such as job-hunting and leadership. I consider that learning by a team is more important rather than alone one because individuals can solve problems together when they have trouble with any kind of skills.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOn the other hand, collaboration is a more effective method for acquiring important life skills, despite the benefits of individual learning.
The revised sentence is more clear and direct, and the use of 'acquiring' instead of 'learning' provides a more formal tone.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThis is because, when students work with a team, they have numerous opportunities to recognize their own mistakes.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward construction and provides a more accurate expression.
Lexical resource
RevisedFor example, to enhance speaking skills, individuals need to engage more with their communities.
The revised sentence is more clear and natural, and the use of 'engage' and 'communities' provides a more accurate expression.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedFor instance, collectively trying new technology can save time and leverage collective skills, as it allows learners to share resources and expertise.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward construction and provides a more accurate expression.
Team-working, however, has more opportunity to develop essential skills for life such as collaboration and leadership.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn conclusion, while individual learning has its advantages such as promoting independence and eliminating distractions.
The revised sentence is more clear and concise, and the use of 'while' instead of 'although' provides a more formal tone.
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved. The essay follows a logical structure, but transitions between paragraphs and within paragraphs could be smoother. The introduction sets up the topic well, but the connection between different points could be enhanced with more explicit linking phrases. Ensuring that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that all sentences in the paragraph support that idea will also help improve coherence.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more effectively.
- Ensure that your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of your essay.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOn the one hand, there are several reasons to support the idea that some important skills are best learned through individual activities.
The revised sentence is more clear and concise, and the use of 'several' instead of 'many' provides a more formal tone.
RevisedOn the other hand, collaboration is a more effective method for acquiring important life skills, despite the benefits of individual learning.
The revised sentence is more clear and direct, and the use of 'acquiring' instead of 'learning' provides a more formal tone.
RevisedIn conclusion, while individual learning has its advantages such as promoting independence and eliminating distractions.
The revised sentence is more clear and concise, and the use of 'while' instead of 'although' provides a more formal tone.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a variety of complex structures. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence construction. The essay contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity and readability. These include issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and preposition use. For example, "if people work lone" should be "if people work alone," and "any person can overcome any problems which are related to discipline and time-management" should be "individuals can overcome problems related to discipline and time management." Proofreading the essay for these errors and correcting them will improve its overall quality.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedI strongly agree that a significant number of important skills are best learned through team-working.
The revised sentence corrects the article usage and provides a more accurate expression.
RevisedThis is because, when students work with a team, they have numerous opportunities to recognize their own mistakes.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward construction and provides a more accurate expression.
RevisedFor instance, collectively trying new technology can save time and leverage collective skills, as it allows learners to share resources and expertise.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward construction and provides a more accurate expression.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good command of a broad lexical repertoire. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, but there are instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. For example, "avoid to get distracted" should be "avoid distractions," and "making decision independently" should be "making decisions independently." Refining these choices will improve the overall clarity and professionalism of the essay.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIt is widely believed that the most important life skills are often acquired through group activities; however, some individuals prefer to learn these skills independently.
The revised sentence is more clear and direct, and the use of 'life skills' instead of 'important skills for live' provides a more accurate expression.
RevisedFirstly, individuals working alone are less likely to be distracted and can therefore be more productive.
The revised sentence is more clear and natural, and the use of 'less likely to be distracted' and 'more productive' provides a more accurate expression.
RevisedFor example, to enhance speaking skills, individuals need to engage more with their communities.
The revised sentence is more clear and natural, and the use of 'engage' and 'communities' provides a more accurate expression.
Task response
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay effectively addresses the prompt by discussing the benefits of both group learning and individual learning. The writer presents a clear stance, supporting the idea that important skills are best learned through group activities. The argument is well-developed and supported with relevant points, but the essay could benefit from more specific examples to illustrate the benefits of group learning more concretely. The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points but could be more comprehensive.
Suggestions
- Consider providing more specific examples to support your arguments.
- Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and is well-developed.
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