Team activities and life skills: IELTS Task 2 essay #17, band 7.0

People’s interests related to the topics of dealing with groups or teams and training alone have become a controversial topic in today’s world. While some argue that training with a team or group is beneficial, I believe that doing it alone can be more effective for individuals and society as a whole to learn important skills for life.

Advocates of training with groups and teams come up with different reasons to support their viewpoints. First of all, the most promising advantage of dealing with groups and teams is connected to the development of flexibility and communication skills. The reason is that individuals can not face social stigma, which helps them get along well with everyone in everywhere. For instance, people can deal with groups or teams, they will hone their interpersonal skills, including negotiation, cooperation, and conflict resolution, which leads to experience greater satisfaction, as well as work in well-paid jobs later in life.

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   RevisedThis is because it helps individuals develop the necessary skills to navigate social situations and interact effectively with others, regardless of the environment.

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On the other hand, the positives of training alone, in my view, are likely to outweigh the advantages of doing activities alone. Put simply, the most profound advantage revolves around enhancement of self-confidence and boost of self-dicipline. If individuals engage in activities alone, they will bolster their self-esteem and self-development, which can result in achieving personal freedom and another significant factor is exploring personal interests. in response to these aforementioned arguments, including me, feel obligated to advocate the idea of engaging in activities alone.

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   RevisedOn the other hand, I believe that the benefits of individual training are likely to outweigh those of group training.

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   RevisedEngaging in solo activities can significantly boost an individual's self-esteem and personal development, leading to greater personal freedom. Additionally, it allows for the exploration of personal interests, which is another key benefit.

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   RevisedIn light of these arguments, I feel compelled to support the idea of engaging in activities alone.

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Taking every single argument into consideration, although group and team activities offer a lot of valid points, I believe that training alone has a greater number of positives which are highly appreciated by many individuals in the long run.