Team activities and life skills: IELTS Task 2 essay #3, band 7.0

There is a debate over how to learn essential abilities through collaboration with others, such as social interaction, better decision making, while others argue that moving individually may offer independence and adaptability which can be considered as main skills for life. I believe the latter idea may be true, but, personally, I share the former view.

Admittedly, people gain some necessary capabilities via moving personally. Firstly, the more working and succeeding alone and not relying anyone promote self-confidence. For example, overcoming problems, doing assignments without friends provide people to go from strength to strength. As a result, it will become more straightforward to be a successful. Moreover, doing activities independently allow people to gain adaptability. Because life is full of with unexpected challenges and adaptable people can adjust their approach when things do not go as planned as well as they are able to maintain their resilience and bounce back from setbacks more quickly.

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   RevisedAs a result, it will become easier to be successful.

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   RevisedBecause life is full of unexpected challenges, adaptable people can adjust their approach when things do not go as planned, and they are able to maintain their resilience and bounce back from setbacks more quickly.

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That notwithstanding, I argue that working in a team for obtaining life skills. Co-operation enhance decision making, collective input from multiple team members often leads to better decision-making, as it reduces the risk of biases or blind spots. Consequently, people establish to make rational decisions. Lastly, group-based works enhances communication skills, as individuals must effectively convey ideas, give and receive feedback, and collaborate with others, thereby, they will not struggle with finding honorable occupation or reaching a deal with partners, particularly in business.

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   RevisedHowever, I argue that working in a team is more effective for obtaining life skills.

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   RevisedCo-operation enhances decision making,

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   RevisedConsequently, people are able to make more rational decisions.

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   RevisedThereby, they will not struggle to find suitable employment or to reach agreements with partners, particularly in business.

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In conclusion, independence and adaptability lay a powerful foundation for navigating life’s complexities and they can be achieved by moving individually. Through collaboration, individuals learn how to communicate effectively, understand different perspectives and make better decisions and these benefits are overwhelmed by working alone.