Robots at home and at work: IELTS Task 2 essay #10, band 6.5
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351 words. Marked by Axiom on 6 September 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2351 words
More and more tasks we do at home and at work these days are done by robots. Is this a positive or negative development?
Lexical resource
RevisedThe world that we live in today is increasingly dominated by robots who are completing numerous tasks at home and at work.
The sentence was revised to correct the spelling error and improve the word choice.
Lexical resource
RevisedWhile there are several positive aspects of robots, I strongly believe that relying solely on robots to complete our tasks has significantly negative effects on our physical activity and can also lead to overthinking.
The sentence was revised to correct the spelling errors and improve the word choice.
This is mainly because they associated with this kind a accurete projects. Another compalling benifit of using robots at work is that having many employees for working simultaneously more than human limit. As result of working in long-term helps to reach the peak of company production, which is a mojority of taking benifits from robots.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOn the one hand, robots are often used in industrial areas to perform tasks such as managing computers and entire systems with greater accuracy than humans.
The sentence was revised to improve clarity and coherence.
Lexical resource
RevisedThis is mainly because they are capable of working at a high level for an entire month without a day off.
The sentence was revised to correct the awkward phrasing and improve the word choice.
On the other hand, using more and more robots at home and at work has still strong drawbacks for people productivite in every singe fields. One compalling reasons to disagree with this idea is that using robots at home for housework and homework concurrently is that reducing and pause the process of rising their developments at school and at home, which clening and washing. Another compelling aspects of being not suitable for robots is creativity jobs, such as being designer, athlete, doctor and other creativity jobs. This is mainly because robots do not have any facilities without their own briain for work. According to recent research that carried out by Oxford scientist said that about 67% of jobs are not suitable for robots, which requires cretivity.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn conclusion, although robots may be more efficient in some work areas, I firmly believe that relying solely on them in all aspects of life is not always the most beneficial. Human involvement not only ensures safety but also fosters creativity and productivity in creative fields.
The conclusion was revised to better summarize the main points and clearly state the author's stance.
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the connection between ideas less smooth. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and reiterating the author's stance.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
- Make sure to fully develop your conclusion to effectively summarize the main points and reiterate your stance.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOn the one hand, robots are often used in industrial areas to perform tasks such as managing computers and entire systems with greater accuracy than humans.
The sentence was revised to improve clarity and coherence.
RevisedOn the other hand, jobs that require creativity, such as design, athletics, and medicine, are not suited for robots.
The sentence was revised to improve clarity and coherence.
RevisedIn conclusion, although robots may be more efficient in some work areas, I firmly believe that relying solely on them in all aspects of life is not always the most beneficial. Human involvement not only ensures safety but also fosters creativity and productivity in creative fields.
The conclusion was revised to better summarize the main points and clearly state the author's stance.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a variety of complex structures. However, there are some grammatical errors and inaccuracies in the use of prepositions. The essay uses a variety of sentence structures, which adds variety and interest to the writing. However, there are some grammatical errors and inaccuracies in the use of prepositions, which can be distracting. Proofreading to correct these errors is recommended. Additionally, the use of more formal language would help to improve the overall quality of the writing.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOn the one hand, there are several jobs that involve working with robots in modern, often industrial, settings, such as managing computers and entire systems with greater accuracy than humans.
The sentence was revised to correct the grammatical errors and improve the clarity.
RevisedAnother compelling aspect is that robots are not suited for creative jobs, such as those of designers, athletes, and doctors.
The sentence was revised to correct the grammatical errors and improve the clarity.
RevisedIn conclusion, although robots may be better in several work areas compared to humans, I firmly believe that using only robots for everything is not always the most beneficial approach at home and work. People, in fact, hold the upper hand in ensuring safety and being more productive in creative jobs.
The sentence was revised to correct the grammatical errors and improve the clarity.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good command of a broad lexical repertoire. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and spelling. The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, with some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice, which could be revised for clarity. Additionally, the use of more formal language throughout the essay would be beneficial.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe world that we live in today is increasingly dominated by robots who are completing numerous tasks at home and at work.
The sentence was revised to correct the spelling error and improve the word choice.
RevisedWhile there are several positive aspects of robots, I strongly believe that relying solely on robots to complete our tasks has significantly negative effects on our physical activity and can also lead to overthinking.
The sentence was revised to correct the spelling errors and improve the word choice.
RevisedThis is mainly because they are capable of working at a high level for an entire month without a day off.
The sentence was revised to correct the awkward phrasing and improve the word choice.
Task response
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay effectively addresses the prompt by discussing both the positive and negative aspects of robots in the workplace and at home. The writer presents a clear position and supports it with relevant examples. However, the argument could be more fully developed, and the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and reiterating the author's stance.
Suggestions
- Ensure that your argument is fully developed and supported with specific examples.
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