Robots at home and at work: IELTS Task 2 essay #9, band 6.5

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352 words. Marked by Axiom on 5 September 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

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More and more tasks we do at home and at work these days are done by robots. Is this a positive or negative development?

The world we live in today is dominated by robots that complicate numerous tasks at home and at work. While there are several positive aspects of robots, I strongly believe that using only robots to finish our projects plays an immensely negative role in reducing not only our physical activity but also overthinking.

Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedThe world we live in today is dominated by robots that simplify numerous tasks at home and at work.
The word 'complicate' is not appropriate in this context. The correct word to use is 'simplify'.

On the one hand, there are also several jobs that help to work with robots in up-to-date devices in often industrial areas, such as managing a computer and whole system in a more accurate way compared to humans. This is mainly because they are associated with this kind a accurete projects. Another compelling benefit of using robots at work is that having many employees for working simultaneously, more than human limit. This is mainly because they are capable of working at a high level during the month without getting a day off. As a result, working long-term helps to reach the peak of company production, which is a major benefit of taking benefits4 from robots.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedOn the one hand, there are jobs that involve working with cutting-edge robotic systems in industrial areas, such as managing computers and entire systems with greater accuracy than humans.
The revised sentence is more coherent and the use of cohesive devices is more accurate.
Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedThis is mainly due to their association with highly accurate and sophisticated projects.
The revised sentence is more coherent and the use of cohesive devices is more accurate.
Lexical resource
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RevisedAnother compelling benefit of using robots at work is that they can work alongside many employees, exceeding the limits of human capacity.
The revised sentence uses more precise vocabulary, making the meaning clearer.

On the other hand, using more and more robots at home and at work still has strong drawbacks for people productivite in every single field. One compalling reasons to disagree with this idea is that using robots at home for housework and homework concurrently reduces and pauses the process of rising their developments at school and at home, which clening and washing. Another compelling aspect of being not suitable for robots is creative jobs, such as being a designer, athlete, doctor, and other creative jobs. This is mainly because robots do not have the facilities or their own briain for themselves. According to recent research carried out by Oxford scientist said that, about 67% of jobs are not suitable for robots which require creativity.

Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedOne compelling reason to disagree with this idea is that using robots for housework and homework may hinder the development of children at school and at home, as it may reduce their cleaning and washing skills.
The original sentence is grammatically incorrect and unclear. The revised sentence is grammatically accurate and more coherent.
Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedAnother significant drawback is that robots are not suited for creative jobs, such as design, athletics, and professions that require creative thinking.
The revised sentence is more coherent and the use of cohesive devices is more accurate.

In conclusion, although robots are better in several working areas compared to humans, such as working in long-term fields, I firmly believe that using only robots for everything is not always the most cognitive way at home and at work, as well as using people holds the upper hand in terms of safety and being more productive in creative jobs.

Lexical resource
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RevisedIn conclusion, although robots may outperform humans in several work areas, I firmly believe that relying solely on robots is not always the most effective approach at home and work. Human involvement not only ensures safety but also leads to greater productivity in creative jobs.
The revised sentence uses more precise vocabulary, making the meaning clearer.

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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the connection between ideas less smooth. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and reiterating the stance.

Suggestions

Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
Make sure to fully develop your conclusion to effectively summarize the main points and reiterate your stance.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOn the one hand, there are jobs that involve working with cutting-edge robotic systems in industrial areas, such as managing computers and entire systems with greater accuracy than humans.
The revised sentence is more coherent and the use of cohesive devices is more accurate.
RevisedThis is mainly due to their association with highly accurate and sophisticated projects.
The revised sentence is more coherent and the use of cohesive devices is more accurate.
RevisedAnother significant drawback is that robots are not suited for creative jobs, such as design, athletics, and professions that require creative thinking.
The revised sentence is more coherent and the use of cohesive devices is more accurate.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. The essay uses a variety of complex structures, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward constructions that can be distracting. The essay contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity and readability. These include errors in article usage, subject-verb agreement, and preposition use. Proofreading is recommended to correct these errors. Additionally, the essay contains some awkward or unclear phrasings that could be revised for clarity and coherence.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedThe world we live in today is dominated by robots that simplify numerous tasks at home and at work.
The word 'complicate' is not appropriate in this context. The correct word to use is 'simplify'.
RevisedThis is mainly because they are associated with projects that are highly accurate.
The original sentence is grammatically incorrect. The revised sentence is grammatically accurate and more coherent.
RevisedOne compelling reason to disagree with this idea is that using robots for housework and homework may hinder the development of children at school and at home, as it may reduce their cleaning and washing skills.
The original sentence is grammatically incorrect and unclear. The revised sentence is grammatically accurate and more coherent.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good command of a broad lexical repertoire. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, with some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be revised for clarity and accuracy.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedThis is mainly because they are associated with projects that require such a high level of accuracy.
The revised sentence uses more appropriate vocabulary, making the meaning clearer.
RevisedAnother compelling benefit of using robots at work is that they can work alongside many employees, exceeding the limits of human capacity.
The revised sentence uses more precise vocabulary, making the meaning clearer.
RevisedIn conclusion, although robots may outperform humans in several work areas, I firmly believe that relying solely on robots is not always the most effective approach at home and work. Human involvement not only ensures safety but also leads to greater productivity in creative jobs.
The revised sentence uses more precise vocabulary, making the meaning clearer.

Task response

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay addresses the prompt by discussing both the positive and negative aspects of robots in the workplace and at home. The writer presents a clear position, stating that the use of robots may have a negative impact on physical activity and cognitive development. However, the argument could be more fully developed with additional supporting details and examples.

Suggestions

Include more specific examples to support your arguments.
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that all sentences in the paragraph support that idea.

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