Looking for life on other planets: IELTS Task 2 essay #17, band 6.0
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Task 2264 words
Some people want governments to spend money on other planets to look for life. Others believe that it is a waste of public money when there are many unsolved problems on Earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
nowadays some individuals provide officials to spend money for other planets to
check other lifes. However, others think that it is a just wasting people money
when there are so many unsearched places on Earth. I completely agree with
second statement because firstly people should research Earth rather than other
planets.
Nowadays, there are a lot of places on the Earth where people do not research.
In my opinion,
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedFor example, only 5% of the world's oceans have been researched.
The sentence is revised to improve clarity and ensure a smoother transition between ideas.
scientents should pay more attention on our planet because people must know
their planet for 100%. Researching other planets are also good trend and many
people interestend about our universe and starts or planets but mainly
governments must solve problems on Earth then we can move on to other
planets.
However, the main focus is divided for others planets governments try to
understand how actually big our universe and planets like Moon, Sun, Jupiter,
Neptun are already reseached by scientents. For instance, NASA which located
in the U.S spend a huge amount of money every year for researching other
planets. Nevertheless, this company found a lot of informations about our
universe while we do not understand yet how big our universe but people
basically know about Sollar System planets. In my view, officials should spend
money for our planet and they should open this kind of companies like NASA.
In conclusion, on Earth there are a lot of problems which we should solve, and
governments should give more informations about our planet. However, planets
in the universe are also important but after our planet
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the connection between ideas less smooth. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and restating the opinion.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
- Make sure to fully develop your conclusion to effectively summarize the main points and restate your opinion.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedNowadays, some individuals advocate for government spending on exploring other planets in search of extraterrestrial life.
The sentence is revised to improve the use of cohesive devices and ensure a smoother transition between ideas.
RevisedFor example, only 5% of the world's oceans have been researched.
The sentence is revised to improve clarity and ensure a smoother transition between ideas.
RevisedIn my view, government officials should prioritize spending on Earth research and establish more agencies like NASA.
The sentence is revised to improve the use of cohesive devices and ensure a smoother transition between ideas.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are some errors in grammar, punctuation and spelling. The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors that can hinder understanding. Punctuation and spelling are also often incorrect, which can further detract from the overall clarity of the essay.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedHowever, others believe that it is a waste of people's money when there are so many unexplored areas on Earth.
The sentence is revised to correct the grammatical errors and improve the clarity.
RevisedResearching other planets is also a popular trend, and while many people are interested in our universe, the focus should primarily be on solving Earth's problems before we can move on to other planets.
The sentence is revised to correct the grammatical errors and improve the clarity.
RevisedNevertheless, this agency has gathered a wealth of information about our universe, even though we still do not fully understand the size of our universe, people are generally aware of the Solar System's planets.
The sentence is revised to correct the grammatical errors and improve the clarity.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of vocabulary, with some attempts to use less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation that can be distracting. Additionally, the use of informal language in an academic essay is not appropriate.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedNowadays, some individuals advocate for officials to allocate funds towards exploring other planets for potential life forms.
The sentence is revised to correct the word choice and collocation.
RevisedHowever, the focus on other planets is divided as governments try to understand the vastness of our universe, while planets like the Moon, the Sun, Jupiter, and Neptune have already been extensively researched by scientists.
The sentence is revised to correct the word choice and collocation.
RevisedIn conclusion, there are numerous issues on Earth that need to be addressed, and it is imperative for governments to provide more information about our planet.
The sentence is revised to correct the word choice and collocation.
Task response
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task and presents a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay addresses the task and presents a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed, and the ideas could be more thoroughly explored. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and restating the opinion.
Suggestions
- Ensure that you fully develop your argument and support it with specific examples.
- Make sure to clearly restate your position in the conclusion.
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