Looking for life on other planets: IELTS Task 2 essay #16, band 4.0

Some people believe that many problems happening day by day and think

governments to spent money on other planets to search for life is wasting of

public money. I content that, people tend to focus another brain out problems like

population, global warming and food consumption.

One side, today governments spends big part's of the country's budget to

discover budget, while there are many unsolved problems on earth. People are

curious from his child so try to learn new planets, creatures and discover new

things. Children want to know everything, practice it. When u say to your

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   RevisedChildren want to know everything and often engage in practices to satisfy their curiosity.

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children don't take this, he or she more inspire to know it and get it. Knowing to

the universe is like this. Nasa company is trying to discover new life from the

universe and flowing rockets to know it. There found several facts about mars. Is

this fact which they fond water from the planet. And they are believing people

able to live there. And build new buildings like tent and suggest people to see the

mars for big money.

Another side of this, some people believe that many problems happening day by

day spending money is very helpful for this, while others searching the life from

another planet. The nearest planet to reach is Mars for us, which takes to arrive

several month with only limited scientist. Knowing the life in the Mars is nor

crucial for, it requires more budget and more money and limited things only

Another striking site is breaking the ozone. Global warming is the one of the main

problem of the earth today. When we fly the rockets to the universe it cut the

ozone shield. That leads to appear enormous unretired wholes and sun

shines enters from it so that temperature is rising year by year. Population of the

earth is growing and density of people too. Some cities like New York

population is more than million. Children born every seconds and that is

bigger than old people die so population will our main problems too. There

is one site is consumption. People can only survive without food roughly 1

month, without water 7 days. Growing population rate leads to this and people

maybe hard to provide food products in the future that is fact.