Imported or local food: IELTS Task 2 essay #5, band 6.5
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Task 2445 words
N many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?
Nowadays, significant numbers of people are preferring imported products even local one is available. This is because imported foods can offer better quality and variety. To make people buy local foods governments have to give a hand.
Supermarkets today sell different products from all over the world, so people can try new tastes and dishes. For example, fruits such as mangos or avocados do not grow in cold countries, thus they have to be imported from warmer countries. Also, special food products, such as sushi fish, Italian pasta and French cheese may not made locally. Because of this, many prefer imported products.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedMany people choose imported food because it offers them more options.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and provides a more accurate expression.
Lexical resource
RevisedThis allows people to enjoy a variety of international cuisines, which is popular worldwide.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and idiomatic expression.
For example, Swiss chocolate and French wine is often seen as premium product. Also, some people other countries’ production more than their local food production. As a result, people choose foreign brands, even if local options are available.
Lexical resource
RevisedAnother reason people prefer foreign food is because it can offer superior quality and production methods.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and idiomatic expression.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedPeople often trust food production systems of other countries, assuming that the food is produced in better environments under stricter regulations.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and provides a more accurate expression.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThis is particularly common in big cities and among younger, wealthier individuals.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more concise description of the target group.
When people see local food is clean, safe, and fresh, they are more likely to buy and trust it. People feel safer is local food is clean and packed well. For example, in Japan and South Korea, governments set strong rules for production, especially for farming and food labels, which makes people to trust these products.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn order to encourage people to buy local food, governments should focus on improving the quality and safety of these products.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more direct statement of the government's role in encouraging the purchase of local food.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIf governments provide training for farmers, improve storage facilities, and ensure rigorous food inspection, people will be more willing to purchase locally produced food.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and provides a more accurate and detailed expression.
Many farmers struggle because farming costs a lot of money, that’s they have to raise cost of foods. It is hard for them to equal their product costs with imported food costs. For example, in European Union, farmers get payments to keep local food prices stable. If other countries do the same, foods costs can be cheaper and more people will buy it.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAnother way to encourage people to buy local products is for the government to support farmers, particularly financially.
The revised sentence provides a smoother transition and better connection between the ideas.
Lexical resource
RevisedIf the government provides support, such as tax cuts, subsidies, and loans, this can significantly reduce the cost of these products.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and idiomatic expression.
In conclusion, while people love imported products because they can offer more options and quality, government can make people buy local food by helping farmers and increasing the quality of products.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the connection between ideas less smooth. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and reiterating the stance.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
- Make sure to fully develop your conclusion to effectively summarize the main points and reiterate your stance.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedAnother way to encourage people to buy local products is for the government to support farmers, particularly financially.
The revised sentence provides a smoother transition and better connection between the ideas.
RevisedThis is particularly common in big cities and among younger, wealthier individuals.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more concise description of the target group.
RevisedIn order to encourage people to buy local food, governments should focus on improving the quality and safety of these products.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more direct statement of the government's role in encouraging the purchase of local food.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few instances of incorrect or awkward grammatical structures that could be revised for clarity and accuracy.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedMany people choose imported food because it offers them more options.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and provides a more accurate expression.
RevisedPeople often trust food production systems of other countries, assuming that the food is produced in better environments under stricter regulations.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and provides a more accurate expression.
RevisedIf governments provide training for farmers, improve storage facilities, and ensure rigorous food inspection, people will be more willing to purchase locally produced food.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and provides a more accurate and detailed expression.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good command of a broad lexical resource. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. The essay demonstrates a good command of a broad lexical resource, with a variety of vocabulary and idiomatic expressions. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be revised for clarity and accuracy.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThis allows people to enjoy a variety of international cuisines, which is popular worldwide.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and idiomatic expression.
RevisedAnother reason people prefer foreign food is because it can offer superior quality and production methods.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and idiomatic expression.
RevisedIf the government provides support, such as tax cuts, subsidies, and loans, this can significantly reduce the cost of these products.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and idiomatic expression.
Task response
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, providing a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay addresses the task effectively, providing a clear position and relevant examples. However, the argument could be more fully developed, with more specific examples and a clearer structure in the body paragraphs.
Suggestions
- Ensure that each body paragraph clearly focuses on a single main idea and is well-developed with specific examples.
- Consider using a more formal tone and style of writing.
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