Imported or local food: IELTS Task 2 essay #6, band 6.0
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Task 2372 words
N many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn many countries today, more people are opting to buy food from other countries instead of consuming food that is grown locally.
The revision corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the clarity of the idea.
Lexical resource
RevisedIt is important to understand why this is happening and how we can support local food production.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the clarity of the ideas expressed.
Many people think that food from famous countries tastes more real. In addition, some people especially the younger generation, like trying new things. The tasting food from other countries can be exciting. For example, sushi from Japan or tacos from Mexico have become very popular around different and new and many people enjoy that. So, people are often more attracted to foreign foods because of their reputation and unique taste.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOne reason people choose foreign food is their belief in its superior quality and interest.
The revised sentence is more concise and direct, which improves the flow of ideas.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedFor example, French cheese or Italian pasta is often perceived to be more delicious than local versions.
The revision corrects the comparative form and improves the clarity of the idea.
Lexical resource
RevisedPeople feel more satisfied when they opt for imported products.
The revision provides a more direct and clear expression of the idea.
Supermarkets and shops now offer food from different parts of the world, and this gives people more choices. For example, fruits from South America or snacks from the USA can arrive in Europe in just a few days. This means that foreign food is now almost everywhere and available all year round. Also, big food companies use strong advertising and social media to make their products more popular. When people see attractive ads on TV or the internet, they may think imported food is more modern or fun. Stores can also offer special deals on local food. If more people learn that local food is fresher, healthier and better for the environment, they might prefer it over imported options.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAnother factor in the rise of imported food is globalization, which has accelerated and simplified international trade.
The revision provides a clearer and more concise connection to the supporting point.
Lexical resource
RevisedLocal food often does not receive the same attention, so it is easy to overlook it.
The revised sentence corrects the incomplete sentence and improves the clarity of the ideas expressed.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedSupport for local farmers can be enhanced when governments provide financial assistance or tax incentives.
The revision corrects the sentence structure and improves the clarity of the idea.
But with better information and support more people may choose local food in the future.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn conclusion, people buy imported food for its perceived better taste, wider selection, and ease of access, as well as its strong presence in advertising.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more concise summary of the points made in the essay.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the ideas are connected, but there are some issues with the flow of ideas and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transitions between ideas.
- Make sure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOne reason people choose foreign food is their belief in its superior quality and interest.
The revised sentence is more concise and direct, which improves the flow of ideas.
RevisedAnother factor in the rise of imported food is globalization, which has accelerated and simplified international trade.
The revision provides a clearer and more concise connection to the supporting point.
RevisedIn conclusion, people buy imported food for its perceived better taste, wider selection, and ease of access, as well as its strong presence in advertising.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more concise summary of the points made in the essay.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there is some evidence of a range of grammatical structures. However, there are several grammatical errors and awkward constructions that hinder understanding.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIn many countries today, more people are opting to buy food from other countries instead of consuming food that is grown locally.
The revision corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the clarity of the idea.
RevisedFor example, French cheese or Italian pasta is often perceived to be more delicious than local versions.
The revision corrects the comparative form and improves the clarity of the idea.
RevisedSupport for local farmers can be enhanced when governments provide financial assistance or tax incentives.
The revision corrects the sentence structure and improves the clarity of the idea.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIt is important to understand why this is happening and how we can support local food production.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the clarity of the ideas expressed.
RevisedPeople feel more satisfied when they opt for imported products.
The revision provides a more direct and clear expression of the idea.
RevisedLocal food often does not receive the same attention, so it is easy to overlook it.
The revised sentence corrects the incomplete sentence and improves the clarity of the ideas expressed.
Task response
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task and provides a relevant response to the prompt. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples.
Suggestions
- Ensure that each paragraph fully develops a single idea and is well supported with specific examples.
- Consider providing a more detailed explanation of how the proposed solutions will help change people's perceptions and behaviors.
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