Imported or local food: IELTS Task 2 essay #7, band 6.0
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298 words. Marked by Axiom on 4 August 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2298 words
In many countries,more and more people choose to buy imported food rather that food produced locally .WHy do people buy imported food /what can be done to ancourage people to buy local food?
There is a popular belief that the increasing number of people are trying tu purchase the imported food than the local food in almost every corner of the world,there can a number of factors for this a prominent case,and also there are certain solutions that can addressed.
To begin with,gone are the days when every person bought products from the local sellers,as there is a rising demand for foreign goods.There are multitude of reasons linking to this global issue.First and foremost,the individuals are highly likely prefer the other countries’ products owing to the quality of them.They consider the fact that the government never imports goods with the worst quality and as a result only the best and fashionable clother or stuff like that comes from the overseas.
The last factor is that people have the variety of stereotips among people ,they ponder that if it is imported product it would be more valuable and resilience.
Lexical resource
RevisedAnother factor is that people may become dissatisfied with local producers after using their products for an extended period, leading them to opt for imported goods.
The revised sentence is more natural and accurate in terms of word choice and collocation.
First of all,the giving specific course for those who have the lack of the knowledge from the economic.One major reason for this is that if they assimilate all that crucial knowledge ,they will not fail to realize the fact how essential purchasing the local products is to make their country flourish as there is a strong bond between the success of local’s production and the country’s financia stability.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedHowever, there are certain actions that can be taken to motivate people to buy local products.
The revised sentence is more concise and clear, improving the overall cohesion of the essay.
In conclusion,although it seems pretty impossible to prevent people from buying the imported goods to some extent,there are some resolutions can be accounted into.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the connection between ideas less smooth. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and providing a clear final thought.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
- Make sure to fully develop your conclusion to effectively summarize the main points and provide a clear final thought.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedThere is a prevalent trend towards the purchase of imported food over local food in many parts of the world. Several factors contribute to this, and there are also potential solutions that can be explored.
The revision provides a clearer and more concise statement of the essay's topic and main points, improving the overall cohesion.
RevisedHowever, there are certain actions that can be taken to motivate people to buy local products.
The revised sentence is more concise and clear, improving the overall cohesion of the essay.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are some errors in grammar and punctuation. However, these do not generally impede communication. The essay uses a variety of sentence structures and shows a good control of grammar and punctuation. However, there are some errors in grammar and punctuation that can be distracting. Additionally, the use of contractions (e.g., "$tu" should be "to") is inconsistent, and some sentences are awkwardly phrased and could be revised for clarity.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedThere is a popular belief that an increasing number of people are opting to purchase imported food over local food in many parts of the world. Several factors contribute to this, and there are also certain solutions that can be implemented.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical errors and improves the overall clarity and coherence of the essay.
RevisedHowever, there are certain actions that can be taken to motivate people to buy local products.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical errors and improves the overall clarity and coherence of the essay.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. The essay demonstrates a good command of a wide range of vocabulary related to the topic, with some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choices that could be revised for clarity and accuracy.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedThere is a growing trend for people to prefer imported food over locally produced food in many parts of the world. Several factors contribute to this, and there are also potential solutions that can be explored.
The revised sentence is more natural and accurate in terms of word choice and collocation.
RevisedAnother factor is that people may become dissatisfied with local producers after using their products for an extended period, leading them to opt for imported goods.
The revised sentence is more natural and accurate in terms of word choice and collocation.
Task response
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task and provides a relevant response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported. The essay addresses the topic by discussing the reasons for the preference of imported food over local food in many parts of the world and suggesting potential solutions to encourage people to buy local food. However, the essay could be more focused and concise in presenting these ideas. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and providing a clear final thought.
Suggestions
- Ensure that your argument is fully developed and supported. Provide specific examples to illustrate your points.
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