Imported or local food: IELTS Task 2 essay #13, band 6.5
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Task 2270 words
In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?
Nowadays, in many countries consuming and buying imported food has become a common feature of peoples’ life. In addition, some people are willing to use products that come from other countries. To encourage people to buy local grown products, government should use some possible methods.
Lexical resource
RevisedThis is mainly due to popular beliefs among consumers that imported food has higher quality and geological standards.
The term 'geogenic standards' is not correct in this context. The revised sentence uses the correct term 'geological' and is more natural and idiomatic.
For example, imported food provides access to products that are unavailable locally such as tropical fruits and vegetables. Moreover, food that came from other countries might be less expensive and reliable. Therefore, many people are choosing imported food rather than local grown products.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe major reason for the popularity of imported food is the greater variety it offers to consumers.
The revised sentence is more concise and clear.
Lexical resource
RevisedAdditionally, consumers may associate foreign products with higher standards, superior packaging, and advanced technology.
The term 'advanced technologies' is not consistent with the rest of the sentence. The revised sentence is more natural and idiomatic.
Firstly, government should support farmers with finance and give more fields and space for harvesting vegetables and fruits.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedHowever, I believe that the government can take certain measures to encourage people to buy locally produced foods.
The term 'counter attack methods' is not appropriate in this context. The revised sentence is more formal and suitable for an academic essay.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn addition, public awareness campaigns should emphasize the economic and environmental benefits of buying domestic products.
The phrase 'emphasize on' is not correct in this context. The revised sentence uses the correct phrase 'emphasize'.
Lexical resource
RevisedAnother possible way is for the government to enlist the help of celebrities and influencers to raise awareness about local products.
The revised sentence is more natural and idiomatic, and the term 'enlist the help of' is more appropriate in this context.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn conclusion, considering the current situation, I believe that foreign products will continue to play a significant role in people's lives due to their perceived quality, variety, and competitive prices.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic, and the phrasing is more natural.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedTo improve the popularity of domestic products, the government should reduce taxes and provide stronger support for farmers and promote domestic food, which might lead to an increase in locally grown products.
The revised sentence corrects the typo 'famers' to 'farmers' and rephrases the sentence for clarity and accuracy.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there are some areas where the flow of ideas could be improved. The essay follows a logical structure, but transitions between paragraphs and within paragraphs could be smoother. The introduction sets up the main points well, but the connection between different ideas could be enhanced with more explicit linking phrases. The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points but could be more comprehensive.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve the flow of ideas.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe major reason for the popularity of imported food is the greater variety it offers to consumers.
The revised sentence is more concise and clear.
RevisedHowever, I believe that the government can take certain measures to encourage people to buy locally produced foods.
The term 'counter attack methods' is not appropriate in this context. The revised sentence is more formal and suitable for an academic essay.
RevisedIn conclusion, considering the current situation, I believe that foreign products will continue to play a significant role in people's lives due to their perceived quality, variety, and competitive prices.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic, and the phrasing is more natural.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a variety of complex structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions. The essay demonstrates a good command of a range of grammatical structures, with some variety in sentence structure. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions that could be revised for clarity and accuracy. For example, in the sentence "The major driver behind the popularity of imported food is that it might offer greater variety for consumers," the phrase "is that it might offer" is a bit awkward and could be rephrased for clarity.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThis is mainly attributed to popular beliefs among consumers that imported food has higher quality and geogenic standards.
The phrase 'is mainly contributed by' is not grammatically correct. The revised sentence uses the correct phrase 'is mainly attributed to'.
RevisedIn addition, public awareness campaigns should emphasize the economic and environmental benefits of buying domestic products.
The phrase 'emphasize on' is not correct in this context. The revised sentence uses the correct phrase 'emphasize'.
RevisedTo improve the popularity of domestic products, the government should reduce taxes and provide stronger support for farmers and promote domestic food, which might lead to an increase in locally grown products.
The revised sentence corrects the typo 'famers' to 'farmers' and rephrases the sentence for clarity and accuracy.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. The essay demonstrates a good command of a wide range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, with appropriate use of academic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be revised for clarity and precision. Additionally, the use of more specific and varied examples could enhance the discussion.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThis is mainly due to popular beliefs among consumers that imported food has higher quality and geological standards.
The term 'geogenic standards' is not correct in this context. The revised sentence uses the correct term 'geological' and is more natural and idiomatic.
RevisedAdditionally, consumers may associate foreign products with higher standards, superior packaging, and advanced technology.
The term 'advanced technologies' is not consistent with the rest of the sentence. The revised sentence is more natural and idiomatic.
RevisedAnother possible way is for the government to enlist the help of celebrities and influencers to raise awareness about local products.
The revised sentence is more natural and idiomatic, and the term 'enlist the help of' is more appropriate in this context.
Task response
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, providing a clear position throughout. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay addresses the topic by discussing the reasons for the popularity of imported food and suggesting ways to encourage the consumption of locally produced food. The position is clear and well-supported, with relevant examples and explanations. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific and varied examples to support the arguments. Additionally, the conclusion could be more comprehensive in summarizing the main points and reinforcing the position.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific and varied examples to support your arguments.
- Ensure that the conclusion fully summarizes the main points and reinforces the position.
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