Imported or local food: IELTS Task 2 essay #11, band 7.0
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284 words. Marked by Axiom on 7 July 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2284 words
In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?
Nowadays, in majority of countries, most of the consumers prefer to buy imported food rather than the locally produced one.
Lexical resource
RevisedThis trend can be attributed to the influence of social media and a lack of trust towards local producers.
The phrase 'attributed with' is not idiomatic. The correct phrase is 'attributed to'.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedI personally think that imported food is usually of higher quality and reliability.
The phrase 'imported food usually have higher quality' contains a subject-verb agreement error. The correct phrase is 'imported food is usually of higher quality'.
First, some social media platforms promote foreign products by showing the procedure of production or using some soft-power methods in order to persuade them to purchase their products. For instance, with advent of social media, advertisements integrated with local foods of some countries increase. For instance, some influential individuals followed by millions of people worldwide, such as k-drama actors may advertise and promote the consumption of products like fast noodles and “ramens”. Therefore, in some countries products such as “ramen” are highly demanded.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThere are two significant reasons for this trend of purchasing imported food over local food.
The phrase 'two considerable reasons' is not idiomatic in this context. 'Two significant reasons' is more appropriate.
Lexical resource
RevisedAnother reason for the preference for non-local products is that local producers may fail to deliver certain products or meet quality standards.
The phrase 'local producers may have been failing in delivering certain products, or providing an adequate quality of the good' is awkward and unclear. The revised sentence is more concise and uses more natural language.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedFor instance, in some countries, excessive subsidies may allow noncompetitive firms to continue providing products that do not meet consumer standards.
The original sentence is awkward and unclear. The revised sentence is more concise and uses a more natural sentence structure.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn my opinion, if the government implements market regulations to enhance the competitiveness of local firms, the quality of local goods will improve significantly.
The phrase 'conducts some market regulations' is awkward and unclear. 'Implements market regulations' is more appropriate in this context.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedConsequently, this could lead to an increased demand for these products due to their higher quality.
The original sentence is unclear and awkward. The revised sentence is more clear and concise.
Lexical resource
RevisedFurthermore, increasing the presence of local social media could lead to a rise in demand for both local and imported products.
The phrase 'by amplifying the local social media' is awkward and unclear. The revised sentence is more concise and uses more natural language.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn conclusion, although there are external influences and issues with noncompetitive firms, a country can encourage its citizens to purchase local goods by enhancing the status of local products through social media and implementing adequate market regulations.
The phrase 'outer interference' is not idiomatic. The correct phrase is 'external influences'. The revised sentence is more clear and uses more natural language.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
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Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there are a few instances where the flow of ideas could be improved. The essay follows a logical structure, but transitions between paragraphs and within paragraphs could be smoother. The introduction sets up the topic well, but the connection between different points could be enhanced with more explicit linking phrases. The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points but could be more comprehensive.
Suggestions
- Improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
- Use a wider range of linking words to connect ideas more effectively.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThere are two significant reasons for this trend of purchasing imported food over local food.
The phrase 'two considerable reasons' is not idiomatic in this context. 'Two significant reasons' is more appropriate.
RevisedIn my opinion, if the government implements market regulations to enhance the competitiveness of local firms, the quality of local goods will improve significantly.
The phrase 'conducts some market regulations' is awkward and unclear. 'Implements market regulations' is more appropriate in this context.
RevisedConsequently, this could lead to an increased demand for these products due to their higher quality.
The original sentence is unclear and awkward. The revised sentence is more clear and concise.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence construction. The essay demonstrates a good command of grammar and sentence structure, with a variety of sentence types used effectively. However, there are a few minor errors in grammar and punctuation that could be revised for clarity. Additionally, the use of more complex sentence structures could enhance the overall quality of the essay.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedI personally think that imported food is usually of higher quality and reliability.
The phrase 'imported food usually have higher quality' contains a subject-verb agreement error. The correct phrase is 'imported food is usually of higher quality'.
RevisedFor instance, in some countries, excessive subsidies may allow noncompetitive firms to continue providing products that do not meet consumer standards.
The original sentence is awkward and unclear. The revised sentence is more concise and uses a more natural sentence structure.
RevisedIn conclusion, although there are external influences and issues with noncompetitive firms, a country can encourage its citizens to purchase local goods by enhancing the status of local products through social media and implementing adequate market regulations.
The phrase 'outer interference' is not idiomatic. The correct phrase is 'external influences'. The revised sentence is more clear and uses more natural language.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. The essay demonstrates a good command of a wide range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, with appropriate use of academic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be revised for clarity. Additionally, the use of more varied and precise language could enhance the overall quality of the essay.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThis trend can be attributed to the influence of social media and a lack of trust towards local producers.
The phrase 'attributed with' is not idiomatic. The correct phrase is 'attributed to'.
RevisedAnother reason for the preference for non-local products is that local producers may fail to deliver certain products or meet quality standards.
The phrase 'local producers may have been failing in delivering certain products, or providing an adequate quality of the good' is awkward and unclear. The revised sentence is more concise and uses more natural language.
RevisedFurthermore, increasing the presence of local social media could lead to a rise in demand for both local and imported products.
The phrase 'by amplifying the local social media' is awkward and unclear. The revised sentence is more concise and uses more natural language.
Task response
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, providing a clear position throughout. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported. The essay effectively addresses the prompt by discussing the reasons for the preference for imported food over local food in many countries and suggesting ways to encourage the consumption of local food. The writer presents a clear explanation of the factors contributing to this trend and proposes practical solutions to address the issue. However, the argument could be more fully developed with additional supporting details and examples.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific examples to support the arguments.
- Ensure that each paragraph fully develops a single idea or argument.
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