Imported or local food: IELTS Task 2 essay #9, band 7.5

There is a view that the majority of people prioritize imported food over local cuisine. While this trend can be attributed to the willingness of people to learn other traditions, culture and history as well as the non existence of certain food, i believe that raising awareness about the importance of local food and investing in national businesses can be the efficient way to tackle this problem.

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   RevisedI believe that raising awareness about the importance of local food and investing in national businesses can effectively tackle this problem.

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One major reason is the fact that individuals have desire to gain insights into the way people from different backgrounds live in. In fact, there are various foods, traditions, preferences and cultures in each country which many people usually follow. But, with the advent of opportunities to export and import the several daily items, people have recently got the accessibility to try different national-based foods from around the world, enhancing their knowledge about the lifestyle and history of certain country. Japan would be a pertinent example, where the main part of individuals lead a healthy diet, with consuming rice, water and these sort of foods which helps them stay in shape and healthy. Thus, if people from other countries try Japanese cuisine, they would undeniably foster their understanding about Japanese culture and tradition. Another clear factor why people lean toward the imported food is the fact that certain foods might not be available in their own countries. In terms of fruit, pineapples and oranges might be the prominent examples, the types of fruits which are rare to find in Asian countries such as in Uzbekistan. Therefore, when people have a chance to import them to this country and sell, locals, undoubtedly want to try the taste, neglecting the fruits which are grown in their own country.

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   RevisedOne major reason is that individuals have a desire to gain insights into the way people from different backgrounds live.

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   RevisedIn fact, there are various foods, traditions, and cultural preferences that people in each country follow.

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   RevisedAnother clear factor is that people might lean towards imported food because certain items are not readily available in their own countries.

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   RevisedFor example, in terms of fruit, pineapples and oranges are rarely found in Asian countries like Uzbekistan.

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Despite the clear reasons above, there are proper solutions in which people can be persuaded to consume their own local food. One of which would by raising the awareness of people about the importance and advantages of their own national food. When people are convinced that local foods are more reliable and high in nutritients through the aid of social media, for example, people are more likely to transform their daily consumption to local food. In doing so, although people try the imported food rarely, they are more likely to make the national food as their regular consumption. In addition, government plays crucial in encouraging people to eat local food by allocating certain funding to the business-people who have inclination to open local restaurants. For example, government authorities can support them by covering all the cost of renting the place. Such an approach can push individuals to prioritize national food rather than international.

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   RevisedDespite these clear reasons, there are effective solutions to persuade people to consume more local food.

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   RevisedIn doing so, even though people rarely try imported food, they are more likely to switch to national food for their regular consumption.

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   RevisedThis approach can encourage individuals to prioritize national food over international options.

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In conclusion, while developing knowledge about the way people live in, their history and tradition might, as well as non-existence of certain food can be clear reasons why individuals want to eat imported food, i believe that by allocating money to businessmen and raising people's awareness about the significance of local food can be the way to address this issue.