Imported or local food: IELTS Task 2 essay #4, band 7.0
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364 words. Marked by Axiom on 5 July 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2364 words
In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?
In recent years, most people prefer foreign meals more compared to local goods. However, there are also effective ways of encouraging people to buy local products.
Lexical resource
RevisedSeveral factors, including misinformation and media influence, contribute to this trend.
The revision corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the clarity of the idea.
Even when local food is just as healthy, people still choose to buy foreign ones, as a sign of their reputation.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe belief that imported food is superior in quality and taste often influences people's preferences.
The revision improves the flow of ideas by making the sentence more concise and direct.
Lexical resource
RevisedThey perceive foreign cuisine as superior due to the use of higher quality ingredients and culinary expertise.
The revision improves the accuracy and naturalness of the phrasing.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedFor example, French cheese and Italian pasta are widely recognized and appreciated, often being perceived as more delicious compared to similar local fresh products.
The revision corrects the grammatical error and improves the clarity of the idea.
Nowadays, international foods are available in most of the supermarkets, and are often promoted as fashionable and better. For instance, chefs and influencers on social media cook meals and simultaneously advertise the ingredients that are imported from a particular country. This encourages people to copy what they see on the internet and make imported goods more special and exciting compared to local ones.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedGlobalization and food media play a significant role in driving the preference for imported food.
The revision improves the clarity of the idea and makes the connection to the previous point more explicit.
When people realize that their country’s products are fresher, healthier and supported by farmers, they are going to be more willing to buy it. For example, school and television programs could show that local foods contain less transportation time and chemicals.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe first step to addressing this issue is to educate people about the benefits of consuming local food.
The revision provides a clearer connection to the subsequent points that will be made in support of this idea.
Lexical resource
RevisedThis could instill a sense of pride in people about choosing local products over imported ones.
The revision improves the formality and clarity of the phrasing.
Additionally, governments should make financial changes on foods. For instance, the government should set high taxes on imported products and make local food more affordable.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIf local food becomes more affordable and accessible, it will likely encourage more people to purchase it.
The revision improves the formality and clarity of the phrasing.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThis will not only make local food more accessible but also reduce the consumption of foreign products.
The revision corrects the grammatical error and improves the clarity of the idea.
In conclusion, this trend of buying international foods is caused by the belief that imported meals are better and globalization of them. However, there are several steps that could be done to solve this problem, such as education of food and making local products more affordable.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there are a few instances where the flow of ideas could be improved. The essay follows a logical structure, but transitions between ideas and paragraphs could be smoother. The introduction sets up the topic well, but the connection between different points could be enhanced with more explicit linking phrases. The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points but could be more comprehensive.
Suggestions
- Improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe belief that imported food is superior in quality and taste often influences people's preferences.
The revision improves the flow of ideas by making the sentence more concise and direct.
RevisedGlobalization and food media play a significant role in driving the preference for imported food.
The revision improves the clarity of the idea and makes the connection to the previous point more explicit.
RevisedThe first step to addressing this issue is to educate people about the benefits of consuming local food.
The revision provides a clearer connection to the subsequent points that will be made in support of this idea.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a variety of complex structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions. The essay uses a variety of sentence structures and is generally free of grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect verb forms that could be revised for clarity. Additionally, the use of more specific examples could enhance the argument.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedFor example, French cheese and Italian pasta are widely recognized and appreciated, often being perceived as more delicious compared to similar local fresh products.
The revision corrects the grammatical error and improves the clarity of the idea.
RevisedIf local food becomes more affordable and accessible, it will likely encourage more people to purchase it.
The revision improves the formality and clarity of the phrasing.
RevisedThis will not only make local food more accessible but also reduce the consumption of foreign products.
The revision corrects the grammatical error and improves the clarity of the idea.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. The essay demonstrates a good command of a wide range of vocabulary related to the topic. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be revised for clarity. Additionally, the use of more specific examples could enhance the argument.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedSeveral factors, including misinformation and media influence, contribute to this trend.
The revision corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the clarity of the idea.
RevisedThey perceive foreign cuisine as superior due to the use of higher quality ingredients and culinary expertise.
The revision improves the accuracy and naturalness of the phrasing.
RevisedThis could instill a sense of pride in people about choosing local products over imported ones.
The revision improves the formality and clarity of the phrasing.
Task response
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, providing a clear position throughout. However, the argument could be more fully developed in places. The essay effectively addresses the prompt by discussing the reasons for the preference for imported food and suggesting ways to encourage the consumption of local food. The ideas are relevant and well-developed, with the essay providing clear explanations and examples. However, the argument could be more fully developed in places, and the conclusion could be more comprehensive.
Suggestions
- Ensure that the argument is fully developed in all parts of the essay.
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