Imported or local food: IELTS Task 2 essay #1, band 7.0

In many parts of the world, people now prefer to buy imported food over locally produced food. While this can be attributed to several reasons, some steps can be taken to encourage individuals to buy local produce.

First reason why people are opting for foreign food items is that they are often imported and distributed by significantly richer companies that have a great share of the market. To compare with smaller local food businesses, those major players of the food market have got enough capital and power to advertise their products on TV and ad posters to make it certain that the public will know about their product. This, in turn, will almost certainly make their product popular among the people. Another reason for the popularity of the imported food is the globalization. Globalization is bringing nations, cultures, traditions and also foods together. Trying foreign food has become so easy these days that people try, like and crave the food of foreign countries which will drive the need for imported food.

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   RevisedOne reason people prefer imported food items is that they are often distributed by larger, wealthier companies that dominate the market.

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   RevisedThis, in turn, likely makes their product popular among the public.

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   RevisedConsuming foreign food has become more accessible, leading to an increase in people trying, liking, and craving cuisine from other countries, thus driving the demand for imported food.

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To encourage people to buy locally produced food, governments can impose higher tariffs on imported produce to increase their price in the domestic marked and give the local farmers and businesses a chance to grow their capacity to compete with big international companies. This is one of the common policies that governments apply in such situations. Furthermore, agriculture sector of the economy should be developed through enough funding for innovations and research, so that food items that are imported from other parts of the world can be grown domestically. Once farmers adopt the farming methods of foreign food products, such as fruit and vegetables, the public can purchase and consume them at a relatively lower price since the domestically produced food is less costly due to avoided transportation and other administrative expenses.

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   RevisedTo encourage people to buy locally produced food, governments can impose higher tariffs on imported produce. This would increase the cost of imported goods in the domestic market, giving local farmers and businesses a better chance to compete with international companies.

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   RevisedOnce farmers adopt the farming methods of foreign food products, such as fruit and vegetables, the public can purchase these items at a lower price. This is because domestically produced food is less costly due to avoided transportation and other administrative expenses.

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In conclusion, people nowadays choose more imported food because of the effect of globalization and the domination of big importing businesses in the food marked. However, the situation can be improved by the government intervention in the market and necessary funding to improve the agriculture sector.