Imported or local food: IELTS Task 2 essay #12, band 6.0
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280 words. Marked by Axiom on 17 August 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2280 words
In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?
There is no doubt that in the contemporary world, many people are choosing to
purchase imported food instead of local food. Although there are several reasons
for this issue, I think reducing the costs of local food and making them more
accessible may encourage people to buy local dishes.
The main reason why more and more people are buying imported food is that
they want to try new dishes, new flavours and compare those with the local ones.
Lexical resource
RevisedPeople who are tired of eating the same local food often opt to try new and diverse flavors.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and natural collocation.
because imported food usually made of ingrediants which can not be found in the
local areas. People usually try imported food and compare those with the local
food, but if they do not
Lexical resource
Revisedand if they enjoy it, they are likely to continue consuming imported food in the long term,
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and natural collocation.
like it, they will start to value local food because most people take their local food
for granted.
Many
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedA potential solution to this issue could be reducing the cost of local food, making it more competitive in price with imported options.
The revised sentence provides a more specific and clear solution to the issue.
restaurants charge a considerable amount of money for their services and food,
and they do not want to compete with other restaurants. That is why imported
food charge comparetively lower prices for their food to make new clients.
So by reducing the costs of
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedFamilies with low income might not have a choice.
The revised sentence corrects the sentence fragment, making it a complete and coherent sentence.
local food would definetely benefit. Another solution is that, governments shuld
make local dishes more accessible. Overseas food brands often establish new
branches in another countries to make profit, and in some countries there are
more imported food than in the local food. By making local food more accessible
people may choose local food rather than imported.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the connection between ideas less smooth. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and reinforcing the argument.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
- Make sure the conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reinforces the argument.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe primary reason for the increasing preference for imported food is the desire to try new dishes and flavors that are not readily available locally.
The revised sentence provides a more concise and clear explanation of the reason for the trend.
RevisedA potential solution to this issue could be reducing the cost of local food, making it more competitive in price with imported options.
The revised sentence provides a more specific and clear solution to the issue.
RevisedAnother potential solution is for governments to make local food more accessible and affordable.
The revised sentence provides a more clear and concise solution.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are some errors in grammar, punctuation and spelling. However, these errors do not generally impede communication. The essay uses a variety of sentence structures, which adds variety and interest to the writing. However, there are some grammatical errors and awkward constructions that can be distracting. Proofreading is recommended to correct these errors and improve the overall quality of the writing.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedPeople often try imported food and compare it with the local food,
The revised sentence corrects the pronoun reference and provides a more natural collocation.
RevisedThis is why imported food is priced comparatively lower to attract new clients.
The revised sentence corrects the word form and word order, making the sentence more accurate and natural.
RevisedFamilies with low income might not have a choice.
The revised sentence corrects the sentence fragment, making it a complete and coherent sentence.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. The essay demonstrates a good command of a wide range of vocabulary related to the topic, with some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choices that could be revised for clarity. Additionally, the use of more varied and precise language could help to strengthen the argument.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedPeople who are tired of eating the same local food often opt to try new and diverse flavors.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and natural collocation.
Revisedbecause imported food is often made from ingredients that are not readily available in the local area.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate collocation and word choice.
Revisedand if they enjoy it, they are likely to continue consuming imported food in the long term,
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and natural collocation.
Task response
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, providing a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay effectively addresses the prompt by discussing the reasons for the preference for imported food and suggesting potential solutions to encourage the consumption of local food. The writer presents a clear position and supports it with relevant explanations. However, the argument could be further developed with more specific examples and a deeper analysis of the potential impact of the proposed solutions.
Suggestions
- Include more specific examples to support the argument.
- Provide a deeper analysis of the potential impact of the proposed solutions.
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