Foreign or local films and TV: IELTS Task 2 essay #3, band 7.5
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326 words. Marked by Axiom on 2 October 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
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Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to import foreign films and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce them locally. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Whether a country should introduce foreign screen content or invest in national film industry is a matter of ongoing debate. While some hold the opinion that it is highly beneficial for its culture to import overseas media, I side with those who believe that it can bring about destructive patterns.
They will be able to encounter a different mindset of foreign people and experience another culture without leaving their couch, which gives them an opportunity to open up a whole new world and look at things from a different perspective.
Lexical resource
RevisedIt could be posited that foreign media can be advantageous for a country's cultural and social fabric.
The revised sentence is more formal and precise in its language.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThe argument for this view is that such media consumption can broaden people's horizons.
The revised sentence is more clear and direct.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedPut simply, viewers can familiarize themselves with a new culture by watching foreign TV series or programs.
The revision provides a more direct and clear explanation of the point being made.
A reason for this is that people living in different countries have, indeed, different values. For instance, most of the popular European dramas portray relationships, lifestyle and social norms that are considered taboo in eastern cultures. In contrast, when shooted locally, titles will be created with consideration of a nation's own mentality and promote the attitudes that will lead to enhancement of the cultural beliefs and customs.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedHowever, I believe that producing content locally is a better option.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic in tone.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedTherefore, films and series produced in these countries can promote ideas that may contradict local traditions.
The revised sentence is more clear and direct.
Lexical resource
RevisedAn example of this could be the open attitudes towards nightlife, partying, and casual drinking.
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Grammar & accuracy
RevisedWhen these ideas are transmitted to local audiences through imported shows, they may normalize behaviors that conflict with long-held traditions and beliefs.
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Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThis could also potentially lead to a gradual erosion of local traditions and identities.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone.
Lexical resource
RevisedIn conclusion, while foreign media can broaden people's horizons, it can also potentially lead to the gradual erosion of a culture's identity and traditions, making it preferable to produce content locally.
The revised sentence is more precise and formal in its language.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
- Make sure that your ideas are fully developed and explained.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedHowever, I believe that producing content locally is a better option.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic in tone.
RevisedPut simply, viewers can familiarize themselves with a new culture by watching foreign TV series or programs.
The revision provides a more direct and clear explanation of the point being made.
RevisedThis could also potentially lead to a gradual erosion of local traditions and identities.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. There are a few minor errors, but they do not impede communication.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe argument for this view is that such media consumption can broaden people's horizons.
The revised sentence is more clear and direct.
RevisedTherefore, films and series produced in these countries can promote ideas that may contradict local traditions.
The revised sentence is more clear and direct.
RevisedWhen these ideas are transmitted to local audiences through imported shows, they may normalize behaviors that conflict with long-held traditions and beliefs.
The revised sentence is more precise and formal in its language.
Lexical resource
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIt could be posited that foreign media can be advantageous for a country's cultural and social fabric.
The revised sentence is more formal and precise in its language.
RevisedAn example of this could be the open attitudes towards nightlife, partying, and casual drinking.
The revised sentence is more clear and direct.
RevisedIn conclusion, while foreign media can broaden people's horizons, it can also potentially lead to the gradual erosion of a culture's identity and traditions, making it preferable to produce content locally.
The revised sentence is more precise and formal in its language.
Task response
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. The arguments are well-developed and supported with relevant examples. However, the introduction could be improved to better introduce the topic and the writer's position.
Suggestions
- Consider revising the introduction to more clearly state your position.
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