Foreign or local films and TV: IELTS Task 2 essay #4, band 7.5

The import of foreign film products and TV shows is considered to be beneficial for cultures, while others claim that these products should be produced locally. I believe that both types of films can have advantages to cultures and that they should be seen as complementary to each other rather than comparing their benefits.

Foreign television programs and movies could benefit cultures in certain ways. Firstly, watching masterpiece movies or reality programs of other nations on TV develops cultural tolerance among the people of importing nations. Korean drama, for instance, has appealed to Uzbek families for some time now that elements of that culture have become normal in Uzbekistan, such as using chopsticks.

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   RevisedImporting foreign television programs and movies could offer several benefits to cultures.

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   RevisedFor example, Korean dramas have resonated with Uzbek families, leading to the adoption of Korean cultural elements, such as the use of chopsticks.

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Secondly, if these media products are televised in their original language, it would be highly likely for people from the consumer culture to acquire that language. Learning Chinese or English by ear from movies or tv programs could be life-changing for people from developing nations as they will have better employment opportunities. Therefore, a culture can benefit a lot from importing such programs produced outside their countries.

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   RevisedLearning Chinese or English through movies or TV programs could be life-changing for people from developing nations, as it may lead to better employment opportunities.

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On the other hand, locally-produced cinema and tv items are of a paramount importance for the spread of the culture both within and beyond the national borders. That is to say, a successful blockbuster movie can promote a culture globally. Bollywood film industry is a great example, since millions of people worldwide are familiar with Indian culture and food thanks to Indian movies. Such a global reputation may also bring financial benefits as those people will be likely to travel to those countries to get a real experience of the culture later.

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   RevisedConversely, locally-produced cinema and TV items play a crucial role in spreading and preserving culture both within and beyond national borders.

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   RevisedThis global reputation could also have financial benefits, as it may encourage people to travel to those countries for a more immersive cultural experience in the future.

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Furthermore, the production of local movies and tv programs is crucial to preserve the culture and pass it onto the future generations. A lot of Uzbek young people get familiar with traditions, such as wedding rituals and national clothes from the movies produced before 2000. There is hardly any other medium that has documented these traditions as vividly as these movies and programs. Thus, producing local movies is a necessity for cultures.

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   RevisedFurthermore, producing local movies and TV programs is essential for preserving and transmitting culture to future generations.

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   RevisedMany Uzbek young people become familiar with traditions, such as wedding rituals and national attire, through movies produced before 2000.

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In conclusion, both imported and local television programs and films can be advantageous in their own rights. The former are important for learning about alien cultures, while the latter is crucial in maintaining cultural elements for the generations to come.