Foreign or local films and TV: IELTS Task 2 essay #1, band 6.5
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273 words. Marked by Axiom on 21 September 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2273 words
: Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to import foreign films and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce them locally. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
People have different views as to whether importing foreign films and TV shows producing them locally.
Lexical resource
RevisedAlthough some argue that foreign products are beneficial for fostering cultural awareness and improving language skills, I align myself with those who support the creation of local products.
The revised sentence corrects the spelling errors and improves the word choice for clarity.
Peope can develop their language ability while watching foreign films without subtitels.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOn the one hand, foreign films and TV programmes can provide two main benefits, one of which is a better understanding of different cultural backgrounds.
The revised sentence is more coherent and easier to understand.
Lexical resource
RevisedWatching international films can help individuals learn about the traditions and customs of different countries and apply this knowledge in their lives.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the clarity of the point.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedFor example, when a person travels to Paris after watching a film related to the French fashion culture, they can better understand the emotions of the people in the country.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical errors and improves the clarity of the point.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAdditionally, international films can help improve communication skills.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more concise point.
Lexical resource
RevisedThis leisurely activity gives them the opportunity to enjoy watching films while also improving their skills.
The revised sentence corrects the spelling errors and improves the clarity of the point.
One of the primary benefits is that films creators achieve a succes in the films industry. This is more likey to gain an achievment on the intenational festivals with the top rewardings.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedConversely, I would argue that the production of films locally can make a significant impact.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more concise point.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThe more they produce films locally, the greater the chance for meaningful development in the process.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the clarity of the point.
In conclusion, while some people think foreign films are better than local ones due to goood awereness about the culture and a triger to learn new language,
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedI believe that locally produced films have a positive impact on the film industry.
The revised sentence corrects the spelling error and improves the clarity of the point.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the progression of ideas a bit difficult to follow. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the key points and clearly stating the writer's opinion.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
- Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the conclusion and summarize the key points.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOn the one hand, foreign films and TV programmes can provide two main benefits, one of which is a better understanding of different cultural backgrounds.
The revised sentence is more coherent and easier to understand.
RevisedAdditionally, international films can help improve communication skills.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more concise point.
RevisedConversely, I would argue that the production of films locally can make a significant impact.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more concise point.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a variety of complex structures. However, there are some grammatical errors and inaccuracies in the use of prepositions. The essay uses a variety of sentence structures, which adds variety and interest. However, there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasings that could be revised for clarity. Additionally, the use of more precise and varied grammatical structures could help strengthen the argument.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedFor example, when a person travels to Paris after watching a film related to the French fashion culture, they can better understand the emotions of the people in the country.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical errors and improves the clarity of the point.
RevisedThe more they produce films locally, the greater the chance for meaningful development in the process.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the clarity of the point.
RevisedI believe that locally produced films have a positive impact on the film industry.
The revised sentence corrects the spelling error and improves the clarity of the point.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and spelling. The essay demonstrates a good command of a wide range of vocabulary related to the topic. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choices that could be revised for clarity. Additionally, the use of more varied and precise language could help strengthen the argument.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedAlthough some argue that foreign products are beneficial for fostering cultural awareness and improving language skills, I align myself with those who support the creation of local products.
The revised sentence corrects the spelling errors and improves the word choice for clarity.
RevisedWatching international films can help individuals learn about the traditions and customs of different countries and apply this knowledge in their lives.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the clarity of the point.
RevisedThis leisurely activity gives them the opportunity to enjoy watching films while also improving their skills.
The revised sentence corrects the spelling errors and improves the clarity of the point.
Task response
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay effectively addresses the prompt by discussing both views and providing a clear personal opinion. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the key points and clearly restating the writer's opinion.
Suggestions
- Include more specific examples to support your arguments.
- Ensure that each paragraph fully develops a single point.
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