Foreign or local films and TV: IELTS Task 2 essay #2, band 6.5

There is an ongoing debate about whether introduce foreign films and programs are beneficial for developing country’s culture. Others argue that it can be beneficial to producing them locally. This essay will discuss both views and explain why I believe that importing foreign movies and TV shows are highly beneficial for countr’s own culture and residents.

On the one hand, I strongly believe that broadcasting foreign films plays a pivotal in helping people to learn new cultures and languages. When people watch different kinds of foreign movies and TV programs they are likely to acquire new traditions and culture, which leads to cultivate a stronger sense of general knowledge and global awareness. As a result, watching international films allow viewers to broaden their horizons and gain valuable knowledge. Thereby, they can become more open-minded and develop a better understanding of similarities and differences between societies. This particularly beneficial for young people as children who allocate a substantial amount of time to watching foreign films tend to gain deeper insights into diverse topics. Consequently, they find it easier to understand difficult subjects and grasp academic concepts.

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   RevisedOn the one hand, I strongly believe that broadcasting foreign films plays a pivotal role in helping people learn new cultures and languages.

   The phrase 'plays a pivotal in' is not correct. It should be 'plays a pivotal role in'.

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   RevisedWhen people watch a variety of foreign movies and TV programs, they are likely to adopt new traditions and culture, which helps cultivate a stronger sense of general knowledge and global awareness.

   The original sentence is awkward and unclear. The revised sentence uses more accurate collocation and is easier to understand.

On the other hand, there are some benefits of producing films and TV shows locally is highly beneficial for preventing local culture and language when more locally produced films are produced, many young people, especially young people are likely to exposure these kinds of films, which serves as a catalyst for gaining a valuable knowledge about own language and culture. As a result, this strengthens a sense of national identity, which helps to preserve cultural heritage for future generations. Secondly, if demands of producing local films are increased, many jobs employment are created for employment people, which serve as a powerful means of supporting local film industry.

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   RevisedConsequently, this helps strengthen a sense of national identity, which is important for preserving cultural heritage for future generations.

   The revised sentence provides a more accurate and clear explanation of the idea.

In conclusion, although locally produced films can help preserve national culture and traditions, I believe that importing foreign films and TV programmes is more beneficial because it promotes cultural awareness and broadens people's perspectives.

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   RevisedIn conclusion, while locally produced films play a role in preserving national culture and traditions, I believe that importing foreign films and TV programmes is more beneficial as it promotes cultural awareness and broadens people's perspectives.

   The revised sentence is more concise and clear.