Foreign or local films and TV: IELTS Task 2 essay #5, band 7.0
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Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to import foreign films and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce them locally. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
It is widely claimed that importing foreign films and TV programs is beneficial for a country's culture, while others argue that producing them locally is preferable.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedAlthough local TV production has its advantages, I agree that importing films and TV shows can offer significant benefits.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more natural expression of the point being made.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedBoth perspectives will be discussed in this essay.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone to the introduction.
Local TV productions lead to a strong memory of traditions, which is especially valuable for those young people who are gradually forgetting about their authentic traditions. "O'zbek qizi" is a great example of such films which describes not only traditions but also difficulties of achieving these peaceful living conditions. In addition, a large number of older people cannot be tolerant to watch foreign ones because of their traditions. However, most adults do not have information about their own culture. Therefore, if there are a wide range of TV shows and films made locally, residents can remain their own culture and traditions by watching them.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOn the one hand, watching local films and TV shows significantly influences the preservation of traditions and provides more information about people's own culture.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more direct statement of the point being made.
Many people are not aware of the achievements of other countries. However, if they watch foreign films and show, they gradually realize that they also should achieve something better. "The Mentalist" is a great example of such a film which can improve people's worldview and explain the psychological condition of human beings in a simple way. Thus, most people prefer Tv shows and films produced by overseas.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOn the other hand, foreign TV shows can significantly contribute to people's personal success.
The revised sentence provides a more nuanced and formal expression of the point being made.
Lexical resource
RevisedResidents may be unaware of the successes being achieved in other nations.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and subtle expression of the point being made.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThey are positively influenced by these types of TV shows, as these films often promote a strong work ethic.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and fluent expression of the point being made.
Lexical resource
RevisedForeign films can also significantly influence the worldview of many people.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and fluent expression of the point being made.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn conclusion, while local shows have their benefits, I argue that the public may gain more from imported films than from local ones.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more precise expression of the point being made.
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Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
- Make sure that your conclusion clearly summarizes the main points of your essay.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedBoth perspectives will be discussed in this essay.
The revised sentence provides a more formal and academic tone to the introduction.
RevisedOn the one hand, watching local films and TV shows significantly influences the preservation of traditions and provides more information about people's own culture.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more direct statement of the point being made.
RevisedOn the other hand, foreign TV shows can significantly contribute to people's personal success.
The revised sentence provides a more nuanced and formal expression of the point being made.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few sentences that could be rephrased for clarity.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedAlthough local TV production has its advantages, I agree that importing films and TV shows can offer significant benefits.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more natural expression of the point being made.
RevisedIn conclusion, while local shows have their benefits, I argue that the public may gain more from imported films than from local ones.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more precise expression of the point being made.
RevisedThey are positively influenced by these types of TV shows, as these films often promote a strong work ethic.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and fluent expression of the point being made.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedLocal TV productions help to reinforce a collective memory of traditions.
The revised sentence provides a more precise and effective word choice.
RevisedResidents may be unaware of the successes being achieved in other nations.
The revised sentence provides a more accurate and subtle expression of the point being made.
RevisedForeign films can also significantly influence the worldview of many people.
The revised sentence provides a more natural and fluent expression of the point being made.
Task response
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. However, the introduction could be improved to better introduce the topic and the writer's position.
Suggestions
- Consider revising the introduction to provide a clearer and more engaging start to the essay.
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