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University library, 2005 and today: IELTS Task 1 answer #3, band 6.5

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171 words. Marked by Axiom on 20 December 2024. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

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University library, 2005 and today: what the plans show

University library, 2005

  • The layout combines bookshelves, large study tables, borrowing/returns, computer desks and an office.

University library, today

  • Private study desks replace the earlier central arrangement.
  • Automated borrowing is shown on the left and student-laptop desks are shown on the right and bottom.
Gone by University library, today
Library office

Academic Task 1171 words

The maps show a university library in 2005 and the same library today.

  1. Lexical resource

    RevisedThe two maps illustrate the major changes that have occurred in the university library since 2005.

    Using 'illustrate' and 'occurred' adds variety and precision.

  1. Lexical resource

    RevisedOverall, the university library appears more advanced with the addition of private study areas and laptop desks.

    Replacing 'developed' with 'advanced' enhances lexical variety.

In the middle of the map, there were tables that were specialized for studying. Book borrowing returns were located next to the computer desks. In the southern part of the library, there was an area for bookshelves.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedIn 2005, the library's north and west sides were lined with bookshelves, while the center featured study tables.

    This revision improves sentence flow and clarity.

  2. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedThe computer area was adjacent to the library office in the southern section of the map.

    The revision clarifies the location and relationship between the areas.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedCurrently, the library has experienced significant changes.

    Using 'currently' provides a smoother transition from past to present.

  2. Lexical resource

    RevisedThe bookshelves in the western section have been removed and replaced with automated book borrowing stations.

    Using 'removed' and 'stations' improves clarity and variety.

  3. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedThe study and book borrowing areas have been transformed into private study desks.

    This revision corrects the parallel structure.

  4. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedThe eastern and southern parts of the library have been converted into areas for student laptop desks.

    Clarifies the grammatical structure and improves clarity.

Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.

Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a logical structure with clear paragraphing. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.

Suggestions

  • Use more linking words to improve the flow between sentences.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.
  • Avoid abrupt transitions between ideas.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedIn 2005, the library's north and west sides were lined with bookshelves, while the center featured study tables.

    This revision improves sentence flow and clarity.

  • RevisedThe computer area was adjacent to the library office in the southern section of the map.

    The revision clarifies the location and relationship between the areas.

  • RevisedCurrently, the library has experienced significant changes.

    Using 'currently' provides a smoother transition from past to present.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay generally uses a range of grammatical structures accurately. Some minor errors are present but do not impede understanding.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe study and book borrowing areas have been transformed into private study desks.

    This revision corrects the parallel structure.

  • RevisedThe eastern and southern parts of the library have been converted into areas for student laptop desks.

    Clarifies the grammatical structure and improves clarity.

  • RevisedIn the center, there were tables designated for studying.

    Simplifies the sentence structure for clarity.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The vocabulary used is appropriate but lacks variety. Some phrases are repetitive or could be more precise.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe two maps illustrate the major changes that have occurred in the university library since 2005.

    Using 'illustrate' and 'occurred' adds variety and precision.

  • RevisedOverall, the university library appears more advanced with the addition of private study areas and laptop desks.

    Replacing 'developed' with 'advanced' enhances lexical variety.

  • RevisedThe bookshelves in the western section have been removed and replaced with automated book borrowing stations.

    Using 'removed' and 'stations' improves clarity and variety.

Task achievement

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task by describing the changes in the library effectively. Some details could be more specific.

Suggestions

  • Include more specific details about changes in the library layout.
  • Ensure all significant changes are mentioned.

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