Average house prices: IELTS Task 1 answer #2, band 7.5

The line chart gives information on the house prices on average in 3 nations from 1997 to 2014. In general, prices for houses in all countries studied followed somewhat similar rising patterns: despite some fluctuations over the span, house prices steadily grew, albeit to varying degrees, with country A reporting the most expensive houses for most of the period. In contrast, country C offered the cheapest houses throughout the timeframe.

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   RevisedThe line chart provides data on the average house prices in three nations from 1997 to 2014.

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   RevisedConversely, country C had the lowest house prices throughout the period.

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Purchasing costs of a dwelling in country A showed the fastest growth. Although the price rate went up negligibly during the first 3 years, standing well below 250 thousand dollars, by 2003, it had grown rapidly to well over 500 thousand dollars and surpassed the rate of other countries, marking the most pronounced rise. In the following years, the price figure saw a 50-thousand-dollar decline, after which it peaked at about 625 thousand dollar, an all-time high figure.

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   RevisedThe cost of purchasing a dwelling in country A increased the most rapidly.

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2. Grammar & accuracy

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   RevisedAlthough the price initially stood at a little over 250 thousand dollars in 2000,

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   RevisedBy 2003, it had rapidly increased to well over 500 thousand dollars, surpassing the other countries and marking the most significant rise.

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A less sharp increase could be seen in the residential property price levels in country B. Going up from roughly 125 thousand dollar, the figure was excced by that for nation A in the early 2000s and nearly tripled in 2005, though it dropped to about 250 thousand dollars in 2008, doubling in the subsequent years. Therefore, this country maintained its position – second on the list – for much of the timescale.

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   RevisedA more gradual increase was observed in the residential property prices in country B.

   The term 'less sharp increase' is awkward and unclear. 'More gradual increase' is a clearer and more natural expression.

The remaining country exhibited the most consistent incarease in house prices. The rate roughly had doubled its initial figure of around 125 thousand dollars by the final year, with the only notable fall of approximately 100 thousand dollars in 2008, when houses were valued at nearly 125 thousand dollars. In spite of these changes, the dwellings in this country were the least expensive in all the years.

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   RevisedThe remaining country exhibited the most consistent increase in house prices.

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   RevisedDespite these changes, this country had the lowest housing prices throughout the period.

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