Imported or local food: IELTS Task 2 essay #15, band 6.5
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291 words. Marked by Axiom on 1 November 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2291 words
In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?
There could be seen some reasons why do people buy foreign country food more and how a problem could be solved.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedNowadays, a growing number of people prefer to purchase imported food rather than consuming local food from their own country.
The revised sentence is grammatically more accurate.
In other words, foreign countries pay big amount of money to the country to advertise their food everywhere in that country. As a result, the imported food will not be the only option when people feel hungry.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThere are several reasons in which people prefer foreign food over local food.
The original sentence is a bit confusing and awkwardly phrased. The revision provides the same information in a clearer and more direct way.
Lexical resource
RevisedOne significant factor is the influence of advertising.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic in tone.
Lexical resource
RevisedConsequently, many local individuals are exposed to these advertisements and may develop a desire to try the featured products.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic in tone.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedSince these foreign food ads are ubiquitous, people are often aware of what to eat whenever they feel hungry.
The revised sentence is grammatically more accurate.
Lexical resource
RevisedOne potential solution could be to increase the promotion of local food through advertisements.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic in tone.
To be more precise, most of the restaurants usually are not near to the centers of cities, they are mostly erected on quieter spots. As a solution for this problem, the construction of more local restaurants in city centers, may be the best option. Since they are in center they do not need as much ads anymore.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAnother possible reason could be the locations of these individuals' preferences.
The original sentence is a bit unclear and could be more precisely phrased. The revision provides the same information in a clearer and more direct way.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedAs a result, local food may remain unknown regardless of how much they are advertised or how well they are prepared.
The revised sentence is grammatically more accurate.
Firstly, the effect of the advertisement of foreign food. Secondly, most of the restaurants where local foods are prepared, are located in rare areas. As a solution, the increase of local food ads and construction of local foods in city centers might be the best options.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn conclusion, several factors contribute to the preference for imported food over local options in a given country.
The original sentence is a bit unclear and could be more precisely phrased. The revision provides the same information in a clearer and more direct way.
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved. The essay follows a logical structure, but the connection between some ideas could be enhanced. The introduction and conclusion are clear, but the body paragraphs could be more focused. Additionally, the use of linking words could be improved to better connect ideas both within and between paragraphs.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more effectively.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to the main idea.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThere are several reasons in which people prefer foreign food over local food.
The original sentence is a bit confusing and awkwardly phrased. The revision provides the same information in a clearer and more direct way.
RevisedAnother possible reason could be the locations of these individuals' preferences.
The original sentence is a bit unclear and could be more precisely phrased. The revision provides the same information in a clearer and more direct way.
RevisedIn conclusion, several factors contribute to the preference for imported food over local options in a given country.
The original sentence is a bit unclear and could be more precisely phrased. The revision provides the same information in a clearer and more direct way.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. The essay uses a variety of sentence structures, which adds to the overall readability and sophistication of the writing. However, there are a few grammatical errors that could be addressed for clarity. Additionally, the use of punctuation is generally accurate, but could be improved in some areas to enhance the overall quality of the writing.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedNowadays, a growing number of people prefer to purchase imported food rather than consuming local food from their own country.
The revised sentence is grammatically more accurate.
RevisedAs a result, local food may remain unknown regardless of how much they are advertised or how well they are prepared.
The revised sentence is grammatically more accurate.
RevisedSince these foreign food ads are ubiquitous, people are often aware of what to eat whenever they feel hungry.
The revised sentence is grammatically more accurate.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. The essay demonstrates a good command of a wide range of vocabulary, with appropriate use of academic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be revised for clarity. Additionally, the use of synonyms could be increased to avoid repetition and enhance the overall quality of the writing.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOne significant factor is the influence of advertising.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic in tone.
RevisedConsequently, many local individuals are exposed to these advertisements and may develop a desire to try the featured products.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic in tone.
RevisedOne potential solution could be to increase the promotion of local food through advertisements.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic in tone.
Task response
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, providing a clear position throughout. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported. The essay effectively addresses the prompt by discussing the reasons behind the preference for imported food over local food and suggesting potential solutions to the problem. The writer takes a clear position and maintains it throughout the essay, which is commendable. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples to enhance the overall quality of the writing. Additionally, the conclusion could be more comprehensive in summarizing the main points and reinforcing the writer's position.
Suggestions
- Try to develop your arguments more fully and support them with specific examples.
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