Growing city populations: IELTS Task 2 essay #6, band 7.0

It is said that the population of various cities is currently increasing, which is likely to have a negative effect on people's lives. However, there are several solutions to this issue that can maintain people's quality of life.

First of all, the rapid increase of the population leads to a problem related to public transport, such as buses and trains. Due to the large number of people, bus stops and subway stations are frequently overcrowded. As a result, individuals have to face a pressure in buses and trains, which is terribly uncomfortable. For example, students have to deal with overfilled public transport on their route home. Thus, it is really inconvenient for those who cannot afford to buy cars.

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   RevisedFor instance, students must contend with overcrowded public transport on their way home.

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One of the possible solutions would be introducing new public transport, because a lack of trains or buses is one of the most common reasons for getting crowded. There are the majority of people who run out of time and cannot wait for transport for a long time, so new trains and buses running every 5-7 minutes would be beneficial for them. For instance, employees who being late for work can manage to reach the particular station or stop in a very short time. Therefore, public transport's development would have a positive effect.

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   RevisedOne potential solution could be the introduction of new public transport options, as a lack of trains or buses is a frequent cause of overcrowding.

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   RevisedMany people are time-sensitive and cannot afford to wait long for transportation, so frequent trains and buses would be beneficial for them.

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To sum up, cities are getting more and more overcrowded. Needless to say, it causes different problems, one of which is a great number of people in particular areas, the delay of transport and dissatisfied individuals. Nonetheless, if the authority uses resources to prevent cities from those problems, people's quality of life will be maintained or even improved.