Diet, exercise and a long life: IELTS Task 2 essay #2, band 6.5
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Task 2255 words
Some people say a good diet and regular exercise are not necessary for a long and healthy life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is believed that a balanced diet and regular exercise are not needed for a long and a healthy lifestyle. I
firmly disagree with this view because remaining factors are equally essential.
Exercising on a daily basis helps
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedFirstly, I believe that a good diet and regular exercise are essential for a long and healthy life.
The revised sentence is more direct and clear.
to improve cardiovascular health and physical fitness. In addition, not only does it help to prevent
problems associated with a sedentary lifestyle, but it also can support mental well-being. For example,
walking every day or swimming can help improve blood circulation, which may contribute to better health
in the long-term and reduce risk of health issues. This means that, being productive and physical activity
can help people to live for a long time.
Secondly, a healthy diet is the most important factor for human body. This kind of diet provides essential
nutrients and also helps to maintain a strong immune system. For instance, if a person is used to eating
only fruits, vegetables, whole grains and sufficent protein, they are more likely to reduce the risk of
health problems caused by poor nutrition. Over time, this can improve overall physical health and help
people maintain a healthier lifestyle as they age.
Lexical resource
RevisedAs a result, it can help reduce health problems.
The revised sentence is more clear and concise.
To sum up, even if some people think that regular exercise and a good diet is not necessary, i absolutely
disagree with them because without these habits we are less likely to live longer and without being able
to reduce the risk of health issues.
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved. The essay follows a logical structure, but transitions between paragraphs and within paragraphs could be smoother. The introduction clearly states the writer's position, but the connection between different points could be enhanced with more explicit linking phrases. Additionally, the conclusion effectively summarizes the main points but could be more comprehensive.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve the flow of ideas.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedFirstly, I believe that a good diet and regular exercise are essential for a long and healthy life.
The revised sentence is more direct and clear.
RevisedThis means that being productive and engaging in physical activity can contribute to a long and healthy life.
The revised sentence is more clear and concise.
RevisedIn conclusion, I firmly disagree with the notion that a good diet and regular exercise are not necessary for a healthy and long life. Without these habits, we are at a greater risk of health issues and may not live as long as we could.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a variety of complex structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions. The essay uses a variety of sentence structures, which adds variety and interest. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions that could be revised for clarity. For example, "i absolutely disagree with them" should be "I absolutely disagree with them," and "we are less likely to live longer and without being able to reduce the risk of health issues" could be rephrased as "we are less likely to live longer and reduce the risk of health issues."
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedIn addition, it not only helps to prevent the problems associated with a sedentary lifestyle, but also supports mental well-being.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward construction.
RevisedFor instance, people who are used to eating only fruits, vegetables, whole grains, and sufficient protein are more likely to reduce the risk of health problems caused by poor nutrition.
The revised sentence corrects the pronoun-antecedent agreement error.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. The essay demonstrates a good command of a wide range of vocabulary relevant to the topic. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be revised for clarity. For example, "productivity and regular exercise can help one’s life to prolong" could be rephrased as "a healthy lifestyle consisting of regular exercise and productivity can help prolong life."
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIn addition, it helps prevent the problems associated with a sedentary lifestyle and can also contribute to mental well-being.
The revised sentence is more natural and easier to understand.
RevisedFor instance, individuals who regularly consume fruits, vegetables, whole grains, and sufficient protein are more likely to reduce the risk of health problems caused by poor nutrition.
The revised sentence is more formal and academic.
RevisedAs a result, it can help reduce health problems.
The revised sentence is more clear and concise.
Task response
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. The essay effectively addresses the prompt by presenting a clear position and supporting it with relevant examples. The writer's opinion is clearly stated in the introduction and conclusion, and the body paragraphs provide detailed explanations and examples. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific examples and evidence to support the arguments.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific examples and evidence to support your arguments.
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