Participation in four sports: IELTS Task 1 answer #2, band 6.0

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Participation in four sports (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (people)
	Basketball	Tennis	Badminton	Rugby
1985	80	150	55	240
1990	78	175	45	210
1995	82	200	50	200
2000	83	210	50	150
2005	80	220	50	50

Academic Task 1205 words

The graph below shows the number of people taking part in four different kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

The line graph illustrates the number of people engaged in four various sport activities: Basketball, Tennis, Badminton and Rugby in one specific place between 1985 and 2005.

Lexical resource
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RevisedThe line graph illustrates the number of people participating in four different sports: Basketball, Tennis, Badminton, and Rugby in a particular region from 1985 to 2005.
Improved vocabulary choice and sentence clarity.

Overall, Tennis and Rugby were the most favourite sports, although the figure was declined dramatically for Rugby eventually. Basketball and Badminton, on the other hand, had fewer but stabile number of participants during the whole period.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedOverall, Tennis and Rugby were initially the most popular sports, although the number of Rugby participants declined dramatically over time.
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Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedIn contrast, Basketball and Badminton maintained a relatively stable number of participants throughout the period.
Improved sentence structure for clarity.

In 1985, 150 individuals were taking part in Tennis and after a decade in 1995, the figure increased to 200. After a continuous rise, in 2005, approximately 230 participants were enrolled in this type of sport, making it most famous among all. The opposite trend was true for Rugby. Although being the most preferred activity initially in 1985 with almost 250 people, the number declined to 200 participants before decreasing significantly to 50 at last in 2005.

The number of individuals playing Basketball and Badminton was relatively stabile. In 1985, Basketball had about 75 participants and after a decade in 1995, the figure saw a small growth reaching 80, but at the end, it dropped back to its original amount. The number for Badminton however, almost did not change throughout the period, starting with a little over 50 and closing at 50.

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RevisedThe number of Badminton participants remained almost unchanged, starting slightly above 50 and ending at 50.
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Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear paragraphing and transitions.

Suggestions

Use clear paragraphing to separate different points.
Include more linking words to improve flow.
Summarize key points in a concluding sentence.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, Tennis and Rugby were initially the most popular sports, although the number of Rugby participants declined dramatically over time.
Clarified the sentence for better understanding and coherence.
RevisedIn contrast, Basketball and Badminton maintained a relatively stable number of participants throughout the period.
Improved sentence structure for clarity.
RevisedThe number of Badminton participants remained almost unchanged, starting slightly above 50 and ending at 50.
Rephrased for better coherence and clarity.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay shows a range of grammatical structures but contains some errors.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, Tennis and Rugby were initially the most popular sports, although the number of Rugby participants eventually declined dramatically.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence clarity.
RevisedIn contrast, Basketball and Badminton maintained a relatively stable number of participants throughout the period.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.
RevisedThe number of Badminton participants remained almost unchanged, starting slightly above 50 and ending at 50.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence clarity.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and repetitions.

Sentence revisions 4

RevisedThe line graph illustrates the number of people participating in four different sports: Basketball, Tennis, Badminton, and Rugby in a particular region from 1985 to 2005.
Improved vocabulary choice and sentence clarity.
RevisedOverall, Tennis and Rugby were initially the most popular sports, although the number of Rugby participants eventually declined dramatically.
Corrected vocabulary usage and improved clarity.
RevisedIn contrast, Basketball and Badminton maintained a relatively stable number of participants throughout the period.
Corrected vocabulary usage and improved sentence structure.
RevisedThe number of Badminton participants remained almost unchanged, starting slightly above 50 and ending at 50.
Improved vocabulary and sentence clarity.

Task achievement

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task and includes relevant data, but lacks some detail and clarity.

Suggestions

Provide more specific data points for clarity.
Ensure all trends are clearly described.

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