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Participation in four sports: IELTS Task 1 answer #1, band 7.5

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229 words. Marked by Axiom on 4 May 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The line graph this answer describes

Participation in four sports (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Basketball, Tennis, Badminton, Rugby for 1985, 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, in people. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.05010015020025019851990199520002005
Participation in four sports (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Basketball, Tennis, Badminton, Rugby for 1985, 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, in people. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.05010015020025019851990199520002005
Values in people. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
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Participation in four sports (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (people)
BasketballTennisBadmintonRugby
19858015055240
19907817545210
19958220050200
20008321050150
2005802205050

Academic Task 1229 words

The graph below shows the number of people taking part in four different kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the number of individuals participating in four different types of sports in one region from 1985 to 2005. Additionally, , with badminton bottoming the chart and following the same pattern as basketball.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOverall, despite its initial popularity, rugby gradually fell out of favor over the years. In contrast, tennis gained popularity.

    The sentence was split to improve clarity and cohesion.

  2. Lexical resource

    Revisedbasketball ranked third and remained stable in its figures

    Used 'remained stable' instead of 'did not record any changes' for conciseness.

However, this dominance was not maintained, and there was a considerable decline in the number of participants during the period, with the figure reaching a trough of only 50 in 2005 and converging with that of badminton, an outlier. The figures for tennis, on the other hand, followed a different trajectory, with an initial standing of 150 in 1985, after which they saw an uninterrupted growth to hit their all-time high of 225 participants in the final year.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedFirstly, rugby initially led the pack with 250 participants.

    Simplified the sentence for clarity and cohesion.

Starting with 75 enthusiasts, this form of sports remained relatively stable in its figures in the following years, eventually finishing the period at the same level.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedRegarding less popular sports, basketball secured the third spot.

    Simplified the sentence to improve flow and coherence.

  2. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedFinally, badminton was the least participated sport, with figures hovering around 50 over the entire 20 years.

    Corrected the grammatical structure for clarity.

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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay is well-organized with clear paragraphing and logical flow.

Suggestions

  • Enhance the use of linking words to improve flow.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
  • Use more varied sentence structures to improve cohesion.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, despite its initial popularity, rugby gradually fell out of favor over the years. In contrast, tennis gained popularity.

    The sentence was split to improve clarity and cohesion.

  • RevisedFirstly, rugby initially led the pack with 250 participants.

    Simplified the sentence for clarity and cohesion.

  • RevisedRegarding less popular sports, basketball secured the third spot.

    Simplified the sentence to improve flow and coherence.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, despite its initial popularity, rugby gradually fell out of favor over the years, whereas tennis became more popular.

    Used 'whereas' for grammatical variety.

  • RevisedInitially, rugby led with 250 participants.

    Simplified the sentence structure for clarity.

  • RevisedFinally, badminton was the least participated sport, with figures hovering around 50 over the entire 20 years.

    Corrected the grammatical structure for clarity.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, with some instances of repetition.

Sentence revisions 4

  • RevisedOverall, despite its initial popularity, rugby gradually declined in favor over the years, whereas tennis experienced the opposite trend.

    Replaced 'fell out of favor' with 'declined in favor' for variety.

  • RevisedInitially, rugby led with 250 participants.

    Simplified and varied the vocabulary for clarity.

  • RevisedFor less popular sports, basketball held the third position.

    Used different vocabulary to describe the position.

  • Revisedbasketball ranked third and remained stable in its figures

    Used 'remained stable' instead of 'did not record any changes' for conciseness.

Task achievement

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay effectively summarizes the main features of the graph and makes relevant comparisons.

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