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Renewable energy share: IELTS Task 1 answer #4, band 6.5

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205 words. Marked by Axiom on 10 November 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The bar chart this answer describes

Renewable energy share (IELTS Task 1 bar chart)2000, 2004, 2007 for Australia, Germany, Norway, Iceland, in % of total energy supply. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.020406080AustraliaGermanyNorwayIceland
Renewable energy share (IELTS Task 1 bar chart)2000, 2004, 2007 for Australia, Germany, Norway, Iceland, in % of total energy supply. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.020406080AustraliaGermanyNorwayIceland
Values in % of total energy supply. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
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Renewable energy share (IELTS Task 1 bar chart) (% of total energy supply)
200020042007
Australia9109
Germany121618
Norway626678
Iceland525956

Academic Task 1205 words

The bar chart shows the proportion of renewable energy of total supply in 2000,2004 and 2007.

  1. Lexical resource

    RevisedThe bar chart illustrates the changes in the percentage of renewable energy in the total supply for the years 2000, 2004, and 2007.

    Used a more varied vocabulary to describe the chart.

It is also worth noting that, all countries exhibited a slight increase, Norway remained a major producer in all periods.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOverall, Norway and Iceland had the highest percentages of renewable energy supply, whereas Australia and Germany had lower percentages.

    Clarified the comparison between countries.

In 2000, the main producer was Norway.

  1. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedIt started at just over 60%, which was the highest figure in the chart.

    Improved sentence structure for clarity.

  2. Lexical resource

    RevisedOver the next seven years, Norway's trend showed an upward trajectory, peaking at just under 80%, surpassing other countries.

    Improved vocabulary and sentence clarity.

  3. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedIceland ranked second, with its energy supply proportion at approximately 50% in 2000.

    Revised for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

  4. Lexical resource

    RevisedAfter experiencing a slight growth to nearly 60% in 2004, Iceland's figure declined slightly to about 55%, maintaining its position as the second-largest energy producer.

    Enhanced vocabulary and sentence structure.

After increasing by 2% in 2004, it remained as such for the next 4 years.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedIn Australia, the proportion of renewable energy supply was the lowest, starting at just 8%.

    Improved sentence clarity and structure.

  2. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedAdditionally, Germany's energy supply saw a slight increase from 10% in 2000 to nearly 30% in 2007.

    Improved sentence structure and variety.

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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a logical order, but some transitions between ideas are abrupt.

Suggestions

  • Use more linking words to improve flow.
  • Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea.
  • Clarify comparisons between countries.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, Norway and Iceland had the highest percentages of renewable energy supply, whereas Australia and Germany had lower percentages.

    Clarified the comparison between countries.

  • RevisedIt is also worth noting that all countries exhibited a slight increase, with Norway remaining a major producer throughout all periods.

    Improved sentence structure and clarity.

  • RevisedIn Australia, the proportion of renewable energy supply was the lowest, starting at just 8%.

    Improved sentence clarity and structure.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedIt started at just over 60%, which was the highest figure in the chart.

    Improved sentence structure for clarity.

  • RevisedIceland ranked second, with its energy supply proportion at approximately 50% in 2000.

    Revised for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

  • RevisedAdditionally, Germany's energy supply saw a slight increase from 10% in 2000 to nearly 30% in 2007.

    Improved sentence structure and variety.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, though some words are repeated.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe bar chart illustrates the changes in the percentage of renewable energy in the total supply for the years 2000, 2004, and 2007.

    Used a more varied vocabulary to describe the chart.

  • RevisedOver the next seven years, Norway's trend showed an upward trajectory, peaking at just under 80%, surpassing other countries.

    Improved vocabulary and sentence clarity.

  • RevisedAfter experiencing a slight growth to nearly 60% in 2004, Iceland's figure declined slightly to about 55%, maintaining its position as the second-largest energy producer.

    Enhanced vocabulary and sentence structure.

Task achievement

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task and includes relevant data, but some details could be more precise.

Suggestions

  • Include more specific data points for clarity.
  • Ensure all key trends are highlighted.

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