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Renewable energy share: IELTS Task 1 answer #5, band 5.5

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186 words. Marked by Axiom on 6 June 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The bar chart this answer describes

Renewable energy share (IELTS Task 1 bar chart)2000, 2004, 2007 for Australia, Germany, Norway, Iceland, in % of total energy supply. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.020406080AustraliaGermanyNorwayIceland
Renewable energy share (IELTS Task 1 bar chart)2000, 2004, 2007 for Australia, Germany, Norway, Iceland, in % of total energy supply. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.020406080AustraliaGermanyNorwayIceland
Values in % of total energy supply. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
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Renewable energy share (IELTS Task 1 bar chart) (% of total energy supply)
200020042007
Australia9109
Germany121618
Norway626678
Iceland525956

Academic Task 1186 words

The bar chart below shows the proportion of renewable energy of total supply in 2000, 2004, and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart details the proportion of renewable energy of total supply in 200, 2004, and 2007. Overall, it was Norway that dominated in three years, closely followed by Iceland.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedMeanwhile, Germany and Australia consistently had the lowest proportions of renewable energy, although both experienced slight increases over the period.

    This revision clarifies the comparison and improves sentence flow.

The former stood at approximately 60% -- the highest figure accross the board. After increasing minimally to 65% in 2004, this figure reached a high almost 80% in the final year. The latter started at just above 50% -- the second figure across the board. Before decreasing to 55% in 2007, its rate increased mildly to just below 60% in 2004.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedThe proportions of renewable energy in Norway and Iceland were comparable.

    Corrects grammar and clarifies the comparison.

The figure for Germany began with 12% and showed a minimal rise to 15%. After reaching this supply, this country reached around 18% -- a .

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedThe remaining countries had significantly lower proportions of renewable energy compared to Norway and Iceland.

    Improves clarity and logical connection.

  2. Lexical resource

    Revisedslightly higher than the rate in Australia

    Improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

  3. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedAustralia started at 8% and rose to 10% in 2004.

    Removes awkward phrasing and clarifies the sentence.

  4. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedDespite this increase, the figure dropped back to its initial level in 2007, making it the lowest among the four countries.

    Adds punctuation and clarifies the comparison.

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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay is logically organized with clear paragraphs and sequencing. However, there are some issues with linking words and sentence flow, which occasionally affect clarity. Some transitions are abrupt, and referencing could be improved for smoother reading.

Suggestions

  • Use more varied linking words to connect ideas.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
  • Improve referencing to avoid repetition.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedMeanwhile, Germany and Australia consistently had the lowest proportions of renewable energy, although both experienced slight increases over the period.

    This revision clarifies the comparison and improves sentence flow.

  • RevisedThe proportions of renewable energy in Norway and Iceland were comparable.

    Corrects grammar and clarifies the comparison.

  • RevisedThe remaining countries had significantly lower proportions of renewable energy compared to Norway and Iceland.

    Improves clarity and logical connection.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 5.0/ 9

There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement, article usage, and awkward sentence structures. These issues sometimes hinder understanding.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe proportions of Norway and Iceland were comparable.

    Corrects subject-verb agreement and spelling.

  • RevisedAustralia started at 8% and rose to 10% in 2004.

    Removes awkward phrasing and clarifies the sentence.

  • RevisedDespite this increase, the figure dropped back to its initial level in 2007, making it the lowest among the four countries.

    Adds punctuation and clarifies the comparison.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The vocabulary is generally appropriate, but there are some spelling errors, awkward word choices, and repetition. Some phrases are unclear or imprecise.

Sentence revisions 3

  • Revisedremained the lowest

    'Least privileged' is awkward and unclear in this context.

  • Revisedcomparable

    Corrects the spelling error.

  • Revisedslightly higher than the rate in Australia

    Improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

Task achievement

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay addresses the main features of the bar chart and makes relevant comparisons. However, some data is inaccurately reported (e.g., Iceland's trend in 2007), and there is a lack of precise numerical detail in places.

Suggestions

  • Report data more accurately, especially trends and figures.
  • Include more precise numbers from the chart.
  • Summarize key features more clearly in the overview.

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