Team activities and life skills: IELTS Task 2 essay #1, band 7.5

The format of the activities we engage in can be crucial in learning essential life-skills. Therefore, there is an argument that team-based activities are more useful in this regard than those practiced individually. Although I agree with the usefulness of team activities, I think solitary ones can also be valuable in developing certain skills.

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   RevisedAlthough I agree that team activities are useful, I believe solitary ones can also be valuable for developing certain skills.

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There are obvious benefits to being in a group when doing various activities. First, the sense of competition in a team sport or doing an educational tasks makes the activity even more motivating. Not only that but also this competitive nature of groupwork encourages people perform under pressure. Secondly, being in a group during an activity enables people foster a quite opposite yet critical competence: cooperation. As a result, the members of a group can develop as a teamplayer or even emerge as leaders. A friend of mine, for instance improved his interpersonal skills by taking part in several Ibrat camp, a local initiative for young people to compare themselves against competent peers or establish friendships. As an alumni of this program, he has built a strong network of friends of the same interest. Thus, activities that encourage teamwork are surely imperative in strengthening these two skills necessary for both personal and professonal life.

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   RevisedFor instance, a friend of mine improved his interpersonal skills by participating in several Ibrat camps, a local initiative for young people to gauge their abilities against capable peers and establish friendships.

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This, however, does not necessarily render solo activities. Specifically, there are skills that are best nurtured by undertaking individual-based activities. Among such skills is independence that is essential in our adult life. Going abroad for educational purposes, for example, can be comparatively easy for those who have done individual activities than those who have not. The reason is such activities including hiking in the mountains alone can help people learn how to manage their resources and take care of themselves in a relatively safe atmosphere. When translated into the real life scenario, the benefits of these activities are immense.

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   RevisedThis, however, does not necessarily diminish the value of solo activities.

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   RevisedFor example, those who have participated in individual activities often find it easier to study abroad than those who have not.

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Another skill to be developed by means of solitary activities is confidence. While in a team, the achievements are clearly a synergy of team effort which the members of the group clearly understand, accomplishing something individually can boost our self-esteem. That is why it is not a surprise that some athletes of individual sports such as boxing have rather stronger character. It is, therefore, inaccurate to assume that individual activitise are useless when it comes to building life skills.

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   RevisedThat is why it is unsurprising that some athletes from individual sports such as boxing often showcase stronger characters.

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In conclusion, I disagree with the idea that group activities are necessarily more important than those done alone in the development of essential life skills. Depending on the particular skill that we need to acquire and strengthen, both types of activities are valuable in their own right.